Juxtaposition

the first stanza is lovely in all dimensions, as is the second. the third and after add such magnificent layers of raw and simple emotions to the whole thing, and the last line, in its resigned manner, really ties the whole thing right up.

also, the title was a great touch.

you're really tearing through DUP like a poetically inclined wildfire.

:]

Thanks aglitch.

Like wildfire, huh? Love it! (I'm carrying a big-ass torch so setting things on fire is such an apt image.)

Thanks for the awesome read/review.

Betty

:) What can I say ?

Romance is the time I  
(never)
stayed up all night,  
just to watch you sleep,  
propped on one elbow
etching the way your  
face relaxes when you  
finally let go,  
onto the indelible  
part of who I am.  

(So very real. Deja Vu. Love the letting go
part. Almost a black hole. Everything goes
inside.)


And it makes me feel like  
the first sunrise inside,  
wondrous, beautiful, unique in all the world,
and absolutely smitten.

(The idea of the first sunrise. A winner.
The rest is confetti. Custom-made.)

Fucking is reminding you  
in the front seat of your car,  
in broad daylight,
that I am a tailor-made  
poison  

(Not sure if the article is needed.
Broad daylight is a whole new level)

and you will never
get
higher  
than
us.

(and neither will I)  

(Ah! Superlative. The idea and how it comes.
Forcefed with naked affection. Beautiful)


I wasn’t begging you today
to fall asleep in my arms.  
So it’s simple, right?  

It’s  
simple.  

Because I simply need  
(you)  
it to be.

And I can lie to myself forever.

(I love love love the end. Don't have much
to say. Overwhelmed is an exaggeration. But almost there.)

Write on,

Sumeet

Thanks Sumeet! I look forward to your reviews.

But... I have to confess something... I'm petrified of smiley faces. There was this incident... when I was a child... and there was this smiley face... It was brutal...

(Just funning with ya.)

Seriously, I look forward to your reviews so much. You're badass, my man.

Betty

Betty, Betty Betty, this is both naughty an delicious... Good to know where one stands though, very right on... Take good care darlin: deadwolf

Thank you my friend.

Folks always know where they stand with me. (wink)