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Fragment of a Story
She thanked friends and family for the October anniversary wishes, never knowing
It would be their last. He would die the next August. You just can never know, when
your time is expired. You are just ash from the fires. How do you know when your
days are numbered or the fragility of your slumbers?
She burned with an agile agony. There was a strange ease to the excruciating days.
Despite them pounding through her veins. To the borderline of sane. Despair dismantling
the hostage of her brain. As she slumped against his aging grave.
And there, the dandelion yellow bulging chrysanthemums. Made her feel just a little
less numb........
It would be their last. He would die the next August. You just can never know, when
your time is expired. You are just ash from the fires. How do you know when your
days are numbered or the fragility of your slumbers?
She burned with an agile agony. There was a strange ease to the excruciating days.
Despite them pounding through her veins. To the borderline of sane. Despair dismantling
the hostage of her brain. As she slumped against his aging grave.
And there, the dandelion yellow bulging chrysanthemums. Made her feel just a little
less numb........
Author's Note
If I was writing a story, this might be an excerpt.
Go easy. It might not make sense.
Go easy. It might not make sense.
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Anonymous
12th Oct 2024 3:33am
As someone who has contemplated many shades of Death
this makes so much sense.
Much respect
Naaj
this makes so much sense.
Much respect
Naaj
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12th Oct 2024 6:32am
To me this makes perfect sense.
I think about death quite often - I think many do.
The thing is: it's one big mystery.
Amazing write, Debbie, thank you for sharing 💕
I think about death quite often - I think many do.
The thing is: it's one big mystery.
Amazing write, Debbie, thank you for sharing 💕
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12th Oct 2024 12:52pm
Thank you. For me this was a risky post.
To just randomly write a small piece of a story, was scary.
The woman is my mom and the man is my dad.
To just randomly write a small piece of a story, was scary.
The woman is my mom and the man is my dad.
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13th Oct 2024 5:48am
You're welcome :-)
I sensed it was about your father and mother, but wasn't sure. Upon rereading I realized "never knowing It would be their last" means they died in the same year? I'm so sorry to hear you lost both your parents. Words are lacking.
I can imagine it was scary to post, but you did it anyway. Something to be proud of 💕
I sensed it was about your father and mother, but wasn't sure. Upon rereading I realized "never knowing It would be their last" means they died in the same year? I'm so sorry to hear you lost both your parents. Words are lacking.
I can imagine it was scary to post, but you did it anyway. Something to be proud of 💕
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13th Oct 2024 6:50am
Hi I did say it would be their last, but only my dad passed away in 2018.
I guess I meant their last they would spend together on earth.
My mom is trying to deal with the grief with while having dementia.
Equally sad situation.
It was scary to post. I'm glad I did.
I guess I meant their last they would spend together on earth.
My mom is trying to deal with the grief with while having dementia.
Equally sad situation.
It was scary to post. I'm glad I did.
Re. Fragment of a Story
13th Oct 2024 00:28am
It sounds a little complicated to Billy but that's quite normal after a bottle of wine & a few beers, lol. However, I feel you're perfectly capable of untangling the mystery (as you should) as you expand on this story, turning it into an epic. If anything, you have already written the preface. Now all you need to do is finish it, turn it into a best seller & then get it made into a film. These things happen! 😊
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13th Oct 2024 6:57am
Wow it's nice to hear you think I could go that far.
It's very personal so this may not be the epic read.
Thanks for stopping bye and sharing your thoughts.
It's very personal so this may not be the epic read.
Thanks for stopping bye and sharing your thoughts.
Re. Fragment of a Story
13th Oct 2024 2:33am
One of the greatest mysteries of life is when our curtain comes down. Well written.
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