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Lately
Lately, I've been thinking
about the way things
used to be.
You were all wrong.
But sometimes,
something about that
seemed all right.
I lost myself in your
powder.
Passion.
Fire.
Fury.
I didn't care
what you made me do.
How you made me feel.
Where you took me.
What you cost.
And lately, I've been wondering
what it would be like
not to care again.
about the way things
used to be.
You were all wrong.
But sometimes,
something about that
seemed all right.
I lost myself in your
powder.
Passion.
Fire.
Fury.
I didn't care
what you made me do.
How you made me feel.
Where you took me.
What you cost.
And lately, I've been wondering
what it would be like
not to care again.
Published 15th May 2012
| Edited 10th Nov 2012
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15th May 2012 9:33am
Meghan
Welcome back.:)
This is a tiny bomb ticking, waiting
to go off. Effective.
Love the minimalism and the directness.
One suggestion: Lose the caps in the beginning.
And the punctuation. JMHO.
Write on,
Sumeet
Welcome back.:)
This is a tiny bomb ticking, waiting
to go off. Effective.
Love the minimalism and the directness.
One suggestion: Lose the caps in the beginning.
And the punctuation. JMHO.
Write on,
Sumeet
