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Steam
What would you do if I walked into the fire?
What would you say when you saw it rise higher?
The fire does not burn,
what it recognizes as kin.
The everlasting yearn.
From the soul within.
I will wait for you, my love
You are the water to cool this flame.
Never really to douse it.
Still, it tempers it all the same.
You need the heat.
For this world that is so cold.
I need the water.
For my thirsty soul.
We do a dance.
Behind a sheet of white.
In perfect flow.
As if gliding in on a light.
It is time for you to leave.
As we had foreseen.
Until next we meet.
In the steam.
What would you say when you saw it rise higher?
The fire does not burn,
what it recognizes as kin.
The everlasting yearn.
From the soul within.
I will wait for you, my love
You are the water to cool this flame.
Never really to douse it.
Still, it tempers it all the same.
You need the heat.
For this world that is so cold.
I need the water.
For my thirsty soul.
We do a dance.
Behind a sheet of white.
In perfect flow.
As if gliding in on a light.
It is time for you to leave.
As we had foreseen.
Until next we meet.
In the steam.
Author's Note
I do not write poems of love. Here is my try.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Steam
10th Jun 2024 10:12pm
Great work. You can write anything. You have the power & gift. Nicely executed.
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Re: Re. Steam
10th Jun 2024 10:19pm
Re. Steam
10th Jun 2024 10:18pm
Very creative, i absolutely love how you can transport the reader into your words. Nicely done!
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Re: Re. Steam
10th Jun 2024 10:20pm
Thank you. Trying the love poems. Normally more erotic. Appreciate the feedback.
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- Edited 19th Dec 2024 5:45pm
10th Jun 2024 11:07pm
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Re: Re. Steam
10th Jun 2024 11:08pm
Re. Steam
11th Jun 2024 1:45am
Do or do not. There is no try. You did with this one. Good write. You've got the talent to tackle whatever you take on. That much is clear, especially with some of you latest writes that have showcased other sides of you.
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Re: Re. Steam
11th Jun 2024 1:49am
Ahh Love the Yoda reference. Thank you for the compliment. Appreciate that.
Re. Steam
11th Jun 2024 10:59am
Nice try, full of devotion and romance,
happiness and success all the way.
Stay safe.....
happiness and success all the way.
Stay safe.....
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Re: Re. Steam
11th Jun 2024 11:28am
Re. Steam
11th Jun 2024 11:42am
Great piece, dear Fia. I especially like the third stanza: it's the yin and yang we need :-) xoxo
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Re: Re. Steam
11th Jun 2024 11:57am
Re. Steam
11th Jun 2024 11:06pm
Re. Steam
An awesome love poem. Reminded me of a long distance love.
Killer lines
"The fire does not burn,
what it recognizes as kin."
LJ
Killer lines
"The fire does not burn,
what it recognizes as kin."
LJ
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Re: Re. Steam
12th Jun 2024 11:32am
Aww thank you. I love hearing what my writing creates in someone's thoughts. Appreciate it
Re. Steam
16th Jun 2024 1:26pm
👏 👏 👏!! Nice 👌 work fia:)))
Steam is definitely 👍 hot 🔥 like fire fia:)))
Please 🙏 keep 👏 on writing ✍ ok peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖 shalom
Steam is definitely 👍 hot 🔥 like fire fia:)))
Please 🙏 keep 👏 on writing ✍ ok peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖 shalom
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Re: Re. Steam
16th Jun 2024 1:30pm