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This Gravity Is Getting Me Down
This Gravity Is Getting Me Down
This gravity
is getting me
down.
Every
potential
falls
into an echo,
an emptiness
that drags along
on its edge
up
to the curb.
This gravity
is getting me
down.
Every
potential
falls
into an echo,
an emptiness
that drags along
on its edge
up
to the curb.
Published 5th May 2024
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Scabber poetry....
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5th May 2024 12:13pm
Ok I love this in three planes.
First the pun. Fucking love it. That was droll my friend and I’m here for it.
Second, the concept of being rolled along a curb makes me think you’re hinting at the the way space-time fabric has lips that we roll against or fall from—- or it was a tribute to taking out trash. Either way it’s a good image.
Third, the sheer merit of the art. The gravity makes us fall, and the concept that potential is subject to this as well. It’s exhausting.
Neat!
First the pun. Fucking love it. That was droll my friend and I’m here for it.
Second, the concept of being rolled along a curb makes me think you’re hinting at the the way space-time fabric has lips that we roll against or fall from—- or it was a tribute to taking out trash. Either way it’s a good image.
Third, the sheer merit of the art. The gravity makes us fall, and the concept that potential is subject to this as well. It’s exhausting.
Neat!
5th May 2024 3:42pm
So Bettyesque!
Trinangulating the synchronicity by creating a tetrahedron, being in becoming, the form is the function.
Nailing down being.
Ironic. Deeper than mere reading.
Trinangulating the synchronicity by creating a tetrahedron, being in becoming, the form is the function.
Nailing down being.
Ironic. Deeper than mere reading.
