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Euphoria
Your strobe eyes,
illuminate my deepest divides.
Makes the lava in my heart rise.
It's always explosion,
the way your passion soothes
Oozing into my most guarded grooves.
Your hand a fallen galaxy.
My heart became your gravity.
Your voice an ancient rhapsody.
All analogy would be the greatest fallacy.
Be my eternally sweet malady.
illuminate my deepest divides.
Makes the lava in my heart rise.
It's always explosion,
the way your passion soothes
Oozing into my most guarded grooves.
Your hand a fallen galaxy.
My heart became your gravity.
Your voice an ancient rhapsody.
All analogy would be the greatest fallacy.
Be my eternally sweet malady.
Published 27th Apr 2024
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27th Apr 2024 11:40am
Phenomenal!! This is a reading list entry for me. Perfect in every way!
27th Apr 2024 11:46am
Aww. That's really nice. Thank you, I appreciate it.
I still get nervous to post things, lol
I still get nervous to post things, lol
27th Apr 2024 11:47am
27th Apr 2024 11:48am
Thank you, I'm as red as the explosion, lol.
Really means a lot to me to have your support.
Really means a lot to me to have your support.
27th Apr 2024 12:39pm
Oh, damn…
I NEED this.
I need to go find me this. Look what you did, girl :)
You’re amazing and so are all of your writes.
I NEED this.
I need to go find me this. Look what you did, girl :)
You’re amazing and so are all of your writes.
Girl, I need it too! Trying to put it out there in the universe.
You are way too kind to me, but it feels good.
Difficult morning.
You are way too kind to me, but it feels good.
Difficult morning.
27th Apr 2024 12:50pm
27th Apr 2024 6:48pm
Your poem beautifully captures the depth of emotion with its vivid imagery, like "strobe eyes" and "fallen galaxy," which create a powerful portrayal of passionate love. The rhythm and internal rhymes create a captivating flow that enhances the reading experience. Consider experimenting with the poem's structure or pacing to enhance the impact of important images or emotions. You could introduce pauses or shorter lines to capture moments of heightened intensity.
27th Apr 2024 6:53pm
Hello, thank you very much for the feedback. I understand what you are saying.
Thx for reading, I appreciate
Thx for reading, I appreciate
