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Chasing Women
You're chasing other women
While you're seeing me
Women here
Women there
Why can't I
Be first?
While you're seeing me
Women here
Women there
Why can't I
Be first?
Published 14th Apr 2024
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14th Apr 2024 8:10pm
Is this a trick question?! What ever is my answer I’m screwed… aren’t I ?!? Oooo…. You’re devious…
15th Apr 2024 00:02am
14th Apr 2024 9:08pm
Dear F,
Oh boy. I’d give him the longest leash possible. All the more with which to strangle him. I think we need to reconsider the closing sentence. Why can’t he be NOT a putz?
It’s a write of epic proportion. We’ve all been there. H🌷
Oh boy. I’d give him the longest leash possible. All the more with which to strangle him. I think we need to reconsider the closing sentence. Why can’t he be NOT a putz?
It’s a write of epic proportion. We’ve all been there. H🌷
14th Apr 2024 9:25pm
“If you’re not first, you’re last!” - Ricky Bobby character in movie "Talladega Nights".
14th Apr 2024 10:51pm
14th Apr 2024 11:32pm
the raw anguish of your poem - the palpable pain and betrayal that emanates from these simple yet devastating lines. I am struck by the way you have managed to capture the emotional turmoil of being on the receiving end of infidelity, the searing question of "Why can't I / Be first?"
15th Apr 2024 00:13am
Well now we know, or do we? Maybe he's running from and not to. Hugs and peace
