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Subtle Thoughts of Autumn
The rain falls all around me.
Its gentle, soothing music like golden chimes.
There are colors in the wind.
Reds and blues, the slight breath
of leaves in autumn.
Like fingers lightly slipping down my spine.
I am deeply hurting.
A soft infatuation.
It stings to think of him.
I gently glide my fingers through my hair,
its sweet perfume of roses and snow
rushing to greet me.
I dream of falling snowflakes,
feel deep inside me the heartbeat throb
of sadness. I turn to leave,
and instead of saying goodbye,
whisper goodbye to myself.
Its gentle, soothing music like golden chimes.
There are colors in the wind.
Reds and blues, the slight breath
of leaves in autumn.
Like fingers lightly slipping down my spine.
I am deeply hurting.
A soft infatuation.
It stings to think of him.
I gently glide my fingers through my hair,
its sweet perfume of roses and snow
rushing to greet me.
I dream of falling snowflakes,
feel deep inside me the heartbeat throb
of sadness. I turn to leave,
and instead of saying goodbye,
whisper goodbye to myself.
Published 14th Mar 2024
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23rd Mar 2024 3:26am
This piece paints a vivid and evocative picture of autumn, capturing both the serene beauty of the season and the melancholy that often accompanies it. The imagery of rain, colored leaves, and falling snowflakes creates a sensory experience that pulls the reader into the scene.
The juxtaposition of nature's tranquility with the speaker's inner turmoil adds depth to the piece. The mention of a soft infatuation and the pain it brings, contrasted with the gentle caress of the speaker's own hair, reflects the complexity of human emotions.
The final lines, "whisper goodbye to myself," encapsulate a sense of introspection and acceptance, suggesting a bittersweet acknowledgment of both endings and self-discovery. Overall, it's a beautifully crafted reflection on the nuances of autumn and the emotions it can evoke.
The juxtaposition of nature's tranquility with the speaker's inner turmoil adds depth to the piece. The mention of a soft infatuation and the pain it brings, contrasted with the gentle caress of the speaker's own hair, reflects the complexity of human emotions.
The final lines, "whisper goodbye to myself," encapsulate a sense of introspection and acceptance, suggesting a bittersweet acknowledgment of both endings and self-discovery. Overall, it's a beautifully crafted reflection on the nuances of autumn and the emotions it can evoke.
23rd Mar 2024 12:24pm
Thank you so much Louis for your beautiful comment. I appreciate you so much and for taking the time to analyze my work in such wonderful detail. I hope you have a wonderful weekend.
28th Mar 2024 6:48pm
You're very welcome! I'm glad you appreciated the comment. Your work truly deserves the recognition. Wishing you a fantastic weekend ahead as well! I'd love to connect further. Feel free to send me a friend request on Facebook if you're open to it.
