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Parked at Argentine
From twilight to dawn
A train moves slowly
through the yard -
no bells, no whistles.
Just the lowing steel wheels
rolling over resounding tracks,
like the long soft thunder
in a deepened aloneness.
A train moves slowly
through the yard -
no bells, no whistles.
Just the lowing steel wheels
rolling over resounding tracks,
like the long soft thunder
in a deepened aloneness.
Published 29th Feb 2024
Author's Note
Texas is on fire. RR is shutting down freight trains for at least 40 hours. Argentine feels it.
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15th Apr 2024 4:24pm
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17th Jun 2024 2:03am
The simile "like the long soft thunder" plays well off the auditory imagery conjured up throughout the whole piece. I also like how the word "resounding" has the word 'sound' in it, further emphasising the importance of sound.
13th Aug 2024 11:21pm
