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Nothing's Lost, you see?
When my frame can no longer hold me here, My Spirit, He will search The Eternal for dreams held off my reach. Planting these as seeds in my children's blood, He will say, "These sketches, Nana left them to guide the path you choose to follow."
We do not only give birth to our children. He Who gives them life, gives us their dreams as well to bear.
Nothing's Lost, You see?!
We do not only give birth to our children. He Who gives them life, gives us their dreams as well to bear.
Nothing's Lost, You see?!
Published 22nd Jan 2024
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22nd Jan 2024 3:28pm
I think that the first verse should be the entire poem. Some odd capitalisation aside, it’s moving and spiritual and traditional. The rest just feels like an unnecessary explanation of the themes. Just my opinion, of course, and I like your style here. x
22nd Jan 2024 3:51pm
Oh! Thank you very much Casted_Runes for your complement and insightful comment.
The 'Odd Capitalization' emphasize the greatest of my Spirit; Holy Spirit!
As for what feels like "unnecessary explanation," well, my poems are a pregnant woman. They conceive, gestate and finally give birth!
xo!
The 'Odd Capitalization' emphasize the greatest of my Spirit; Holy Spirit!
As for what feels like "unnecessary explanation," well, my poems are a pregnant woman. They conceive, gestate and finally give birth!
xo!
22nd Jan 2024 11:07pm
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