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Firesong
I collect your walk
bursting into fire
roaming streets
branding chords
inside my chest
as flames waltz
inside my pupil,
certain as birds
waking up morning
announcing another
day through song
certain as light
breaking into night
where my hipbones
have crushed over
you in the dark.
Published 30th Dec 2023
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30th Dec 2023 4:31pm
30th Dec 2023 7:14pm
Beeetttccchhh! The play of light was so good. It made the darkness in it pop.
You have this heat, this fire building up:
bursting into fire
branding chords
as flames waltz
certain as light
And then… BOOM, this gritty, sexual image in cold dark, as if the heat were sucked in through the pores…
Night. Sex. Dark. Amazing ending
breaking into night
where my hipbones
have crushed over
you in the dark.
You have this heat, this fire building up:
bursting into fire
branding chords
as flames waltz
certain as light
And then… BOOM, this gritty, sexual image in cold dark, as if the heat were sucked in through the pores…
Night. Sex. Dark. Amazing ending
breaking into night
where my hipbones
have crushed over
you in the dark.
31st Dec 2023 10:33am
Dear N,
Fantastic passion through such wonderful use of nature and imagery leaves the reader breathless. As per, I enjoyed your style greatly. H🌷
Fantastic passion through such wonderful use of nature and imagery leaves the reader breathless. As per, I enjoyed your style greatly. H🌷
Anonymous
31st Dec 2023 3:22pm
This is such an incredible poem! Like the build up of volcanic activity
31st Dec 2023 11:13pm
