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he looks for something to give her amidst the crowd
christmas isn’t a great time
to be in town hobbling around
with the aid of a stick at it, though, she’s worth it
Published 23rd Dec 2023
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23rd Dec 2023 6:26pm
Oh I love this! Especially the thought that our own personal challenges cannot stand in the way of love!
24th Dec 2023 00:54am
divide crowds into two; those who attempt to avoid me and those who are too busy looking at their phones
24th Dec 2023 00:59am
Much Love, Paul! I am wishing you and the Mrs. a very peaceful and blessed Christmas!
24th Dec 2023 1:29am
24th Dec 2023 2:59am
I think this is the first time I’ve seen one of your poems’ meaning-switches happen mid-line, without enjambment. I like it. The “stick” pun feels especially Christmassy somehow, like Scrooge striding by with his cane. Only your protagonist is much nicer, of course…
24th Dec 2023 3:01pm
