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The Calling
The falling,
Like snakes sure,
In dust, hides.
The wilder,
Like bare grounds,
In planes, turns.
The shading,
Like dark chance,
In sides, fools.
The summon,
Like eyes wide,
In depth, voids.
The beckon,
Like stars vast,
In truth, burns.
The founding,
Like down to,
In rise, spins.
The transit
Like due night,
In maze, twists.
The reckon,
Like steps tilt,
In paths, walks.
The feeling,
Like cold touch,
In moons, shifts.
The viewing,
Like grave slates,
In skies, hones.
The sounding,
Like dry thirst,
In tone, howls.
The guessing,
Like words spell,
In vain, dies.
The calling,
Like clear day,
In God, spans.
The venture,
Like change sweeps,
In choice, moves.
The cleansing,
Like pure white,
In sight, shines.
The blessing,
Like no end,
In life, gives.
Like snakes sure,
In dust, hides.
The wilder,
Like bare grounds,
In planes, turns.
The shading,
Like dark chance,
In sides, fools.
The summon,
Like eyes wide,
In depth, voids.
The beckon,
Like stars vast,
In truth, burns.
The founding,
Like down to,
In rise, spins.
The transit
Like due night,
In maze, twists.
The reckon,
Like steps tilt,
In paths, walks.
The feeling,
Like cold touch,
In moons, shifts.
The viewing,
Like grave slates,
In skies, hones.
The sounding,
Like dry thirst,
In tone, howls.
The guessing,
Like words spell,
In vain, dies.
The calling,
Like clear day,
In God, spans.
The venture,
Like change sweeps,
In choice, moves.
The cleansing,
Like pure white,
In sight, shines.
The blessing,
Like no end,
In life, gives.
Published 26th Nov 2023
Author's Note
Just a little experimenting with some form, in an attempt to exercise vocabulary and take a theme in a direction, and transition to an overall moral compass. Let me know what you think! Edit - this was a lot harder to write than it looks.
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26th Nov 2023 8:28pm
They always are harder than they seem. The stellar ones. 😊 I liked the style, I almost felt like I was falling through each verse. Hard to explain, but it's a compliment. Parts felt enigmatic. I think you did a great job. Coffees on me. 😛
Ha-ha, thanks for taking the time to check it out. I felt as though I'd reference a lot of looking at the material universe for answers, and how that is "dizzying" in truth and purpose, at least in how I see it. There is much vanity in the physical realm, and it's here but a brief moment, and then gone. To me, there's no divine answer in the stars, but that's a given in that I have some basic knowledge, in terms of what I believe. Anyway, I use a lot of "angles" in this in the verbs and words to depict points of view. Emotion and metaphor are present too. There's some double entendre in there too, if you're keen to see it. I limited myself to one 2-syllable word in each stanza (the first line), and the rest were all 1-syllable words. I tried to use verbs in the first and third lines, in the particular format that's there. There is a lot of open interpretation here.
Thanks for checking it out. Looking forward to sharing writing and critiquing with you in the future!
Thanks for checking it out. Looking forward to sharing writing and critiquing with you in the future!
