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Heartbroken Girl
Faith is a fine invention,
I went against the world.
Thought fate was in my hands,
but I'm just a heartbroken girl.
The motions of Sinking birds
matched the lowness in my chest.
Their wings clipped in air,
tearful memories, I reminisce.
The forest was claimed as ours,
we had the world at our feet.
Mountains echoed our names together,
running through meadows of fresh wheat.
Romance was, by me, anticipated,
but I sit singing the blues.
Loneliness hovers like vultures,
and I can't keep hiding this bruise.
A shot straight to my heart,
pellets punctured my bloody chest.
I pulled the trigger myself,
but misery won't lay me to rest.
A mother, a lover and a wife,
I see my shadow of who I should be,
now I'm just a heartbroken girl
because she quit following me.
I went against the world.
Thought fate was in my hands,
but I'm just a heartbroken girl.
The motions of Sinking birds
matched the lowness in my chest.
Their wings clipped in air,
tearful memories, I reminisce.
The forest was claimed as ours,
we had the world at our feet.
Mountains echoed our names together,
running through meadows of fresh wheat.
Romance was, by me, anticipated,
but I sit singing the blues.
Loneliness hovers like vultures,
and I can't keep hiding this bruise.
A shot straight to my heart,
pellets punctured my bloody chest.
I pulled the trigger myself,
but misery won't lay me to rest.
A mother, a lover and a wife,
I see my shadow of who I should be,
now I'm just a heartbroken girl
because she quit following me.
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Re. Heartbroken Girl
1st Nov 2023 10:53pm
It is very hard to take unexpected in particular the heart-breaking events. What an expression of grief and pain.
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2nd Nov 2023 3:33am
Dear M,
You sure do know how to write depression. It’s extremely impressive. Your flow grabs the reader and won’t let go until the end. Riveting piece. H🌷
You sure do know how to write depression. It’s extremely impressive. Your flow grabs the reader and won’t let go until the end. Riveting piece. H🌷
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2nd Nov 2023 10:40am
Writing is the only way I release my emotions. Thank you so much for the read and comment.
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3rd Nov 2023 5:41pm
Really good! Don't ask me why, but I especially like this part,
"A shot straight to my heart,
pellets punctured my bloody chest.
I pulled the trigger myself,
but misery won't lay me to rest."
"A shot straight to my heart,
pellets punctured my bloody chest.
I pulled the trigger myself,
but misery won't lay me to rest."
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3rd Nov 2023 5:50pm
Thats exactly what it feels like. I actually had those lines first and added the poem around them. I appreciate your comment, and I'm glad you liked it. Also, nice to meet you.
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3rd Nov 2023 5:59pm
It's been a really long time since I've had a broken heart, but I think you nailed it. I hope yours heals soon. Nice to meet you too.
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3rd Nov 2023 6:01pm
Thanks for the best wishes. It gets a little better day by day, but I do have my moments I break down and write these pieces.