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Fur and metal
I plunge my fingers
into ripe kiwi skins
eating each seed
it bares naked
how you dared
to learn about
metal hidden
beneath fur,
pulling away
barbed wire
tucked away
for hands
that attempt
pressing their
prints onto
my skin.
Published 24th Oct 2023
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25th Oct 2023 6:39am
Dear N,
For me this write shows the dichotomy of thinking how we can trust something only to be hurt in someway. I really liked your metaphors throughout. Wonderful piece. H🌷
For me this write shows the dichotomy of thinking how we can trust something only to be hurt in someway. I really liked your metaphors throughout. Wonderful piece. H🌷
Hey Honoria,
Glad you liked the metaphors throughout, I guess it's something of a reflective practice, processing ourselves is the hardest behaviour humans can learn and do, sometimes that includes finding the answers or feeling disappointed when we don't find them, journaling is a wonderful therapy without a charging fee pinned to it.
Thank you for your warm words
Kind Regards,
-A
Glad you liked the metaphors throughout, I guess it's something of a reflective practice, processing ourselves is the hardest behaviour humans can learn and do, sometimes that includes finding the answers or feeling disappointed when we don't find them, journaling is a wonderful therapy without a charging fee pinned to it.
Thank you for your warm words
Kind Regards,
-A
Anonymous
25th Oct 2023 5:54pm
Reads like armor to protect from hurt. Those last 2 stanzas are amazing
29th Oct 2023 9:31pm
Hello Confluence
I like the way you're going with it, fur is an underrated layer we as mammals wear throughout life, we are the more richer for having the power of speech as well as wearing it, i'm glad you enjoyed the last two stanzas in this little poem, if it relates it must go somewhere at the very least.
Thank you for your thoughts
Kind Regards,
-A
I like the way you're going with it, fur is an underrated layer we as mammals wear throughout life, we are the more richer for having the power of speech as well as wearing it, i'm glad you enjoyed the last two stanzas in this little poem, if it relates it must go somewhere at the very least.
Thank you for your thoughts
Kind Regards,
-A
Anonymous
- Edited 28th Oct 2023 00:23am
28th Oct 2023 00:22am
I’m gonna have to say what I thought reading this.
Immediately what came to mind was this image of a bear and a bear trap. Then I couldn’t get the thought out of my head. However then I compared that to the themes of the poem, of vulnerability and what appears to be a hint of sensuality. How vulnerability feels like being trapped sometimes. Constrictive. As if we can choose how to react in that moment.. to accept our fate or to violently fight back. And that adds so much weight.
Vulnerability isn’t always a gifting. It’s sometimes a fight to the death to get to what wants to be seen, and that’s a powerful statement to make in so few lines. That’s brave.
Immediately what came to mind was this image of a bear and a bear trap. Then I couldn’t get the thought out of my head. However then I compared that to the themes of the poem, of vulnerability and what appears to be a hint of sensuality. How vulnerability feels like being trapped sometimes. Constrictive. As if we can choose how to react in that moment.. to accept our fate or to violently fight back. And that adds so much weight.
Vulnerability isn’t always a gifting. It’s sometimes a fight to the death to get to what wants to be seen, and that’s a powerful statement to make in so few lines. That’s brave.
29th Oct 2023 9:56pm
Somebody has definitely read some raw pieces in their time by the sounds of this comment.
Vulnerability is underrated for the amount of emotions and processing it can evoke in a person, people often think vulnerability is wearing your heart on your sleeve but that's not always true or accurate which you actually mentioned in your comment, sometimes vulnerability definitely is a fight to the death to get to what needs to be seen or heard, it can feel constricting, restrained, insular, annihilating etc.
Almost like you don't know what to do when pushed out of a comfort zone, it can cause a person to come to a halt because they're going into a deeper unknown that it becomes invasive and that can be somebody's worst nightmare, you find yourself not knowing whether to get out of it or go with it.
I'm happy you saw a lot in this and shared your process in the proceedings, that is something not many would do and i'm grateful for that, so thank you for being one of those people. :)
Kind Regards
-A
Vulnerability is underrated for the amount of emotions and processing it can evoke in a person, people often think vulnerability is wearing your heart on your sleeve but that's not always true or accurate which you actually mentioned in your comment, sometimes vulnerability definitely is a fight to the death to get to what needs to be seen or heard, it can feel constricting, restrained, insular, annihilating etc.
Almost like you don't know what to do when pushed out of a comfort zone, it can cause a person to come to a halt because they're going into a deeper unknown that it becomes invasive and that can be somebody's worst nightmare, you find yourself not knowing whether to get out of it or go with it.
I'm happy you saw a lot in this and shared your process in the proceedings, that is something not many would do and i'm grateful for that, so thank you for being one of those people. :)
Kind Regards
-A
