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Upside Down Table for One
As I can
and for as long
as slowly
the whore of sleep
and ravage
over my head
pull the covers
to kill the light
I can't wait
for my cold bed
then hurry off
(keep the change
Thanks)
as fast as I can
I'll feed my belly
hiding my loneliness
the perfect mask
Green concrete
like a spy
where I may sit
behind the pillar
that space again
I've reserved myself
Published 14th Feb 2010
| Edited 2nd Apr 2016
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Anonymous
14th Feb 2010 1:11am
to it, and a certain maniacal flow which really works. Scary in it's despair and desperation.
14th Feb 2010 1:19am
Hope you read it upside down from the bottom up as well, Jack. Interesting what a bit of visual adjustment can achieve. It's all a cunning ploy to get people to read it twice! Appreciate the feedback.
Anonymous
14th Feb 2010 1:22am
from bottom to top as well, and I admired the real structure that went into creating that effect. Reminded me a little of some Dylan Thomas poems.
14th Feb 2010 1:26am
For me it's got a bit of Finnegans Wake about it. I may experiment with this more - I could do an upside down series of poems, perhaps we could have a sister website - Upside Down Deep Underground!
Anonymous
14th Feb 2010 8:45am
really moving, and the short lines kile mad spurts of thoughts really create an eeerie picture of loneliness, loved it A.
14th Feb 2010 9:45am
I sometimes wonder if we were born old and grew gradually younger how that would be.
Which led me to the Upside Down idea or maybe it should be Downside Up - and there's nothing quite like a spurt of madness when the world is killing itself all around you.
Thanks for your kind support, Priya.
Which led me to the Upside Down idea or maybe it should be Downside Up - and there's nothing quite like a spurt of madness when the world is killing itself all around you.
Thanks for your kind support, Priya.
