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Roar
Her tears are black ash from the roaring
flames of time.
In silence she lays in splendid surrender.
Sheathed in glorious shades of darkness.
She wished to disintegrate.
She was through.
She began to evaporate back into the
universe.
Pieces of her mingling amongst the twinkling of silenced stars.
Upon the wind you can still hear her fire's roar
As she is exquisitely destroyed.
flames of time.
In silence she lays in splendid surrender.
Sheathed in glorious shades of darkness.
She wished to disintegrate.
She was through.
She began to evaporate back into the
universe.
Pieces of her mingling amongst the twinkling of silenced stars.
Upon the wind you can still hear her fire's roar
As she is exquisitely destroyed.
Published 11th Jun 2023
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11th Jun 2023 10:22pm
11th Jun 2023 10:57pm
11th Jun 2023 11:37pm
This has a very dark theme, but it's eloquently descriptive. You capture the essence of death, as though it's alive, in an emotional expression. Again, very blackened and bleak, metaphorically. Much of the theme and transition is smooth, and builds upon itself, as well as its own unbecoming. You have a sort of aesthetic of alchemy and magic on display, in this as a body of work, collectively. The thought and imagination, through direction, just seemingly melds or disintegrates. Anyway, thanks for sharing. I'm looking forward to more.
11th Jun 2023 11:58pm
I love your comments!! Thank you so much. You perceive things that I don't even see. I like to read what someone else ( especially you) take away from it.
Sometimes I almost feel shy or embarrassed about posting some of my work. I'm an obsessive perfectionist with writing, so if even one word sounds off, I feel amateur. Something I need to get over. I've received so much really nice feedback. It pushes me to want to write an even better one.
Again thanks so much. Have a good night.
Sometimes I almost feel shy or embarrassed about posting some of my work. I'm an obsessive perfectionist with writing, so if even one word sounds off, I feel amateur. Something I need to get over. I've received so much really nice feedback. It pushes me to want to write an even better one.
Again thanks so much. Have a good night.
12th Jun 2023 2:03am
12th Jun 2023 2:14am
12th Jun 2023 10:53am
12th Jun 2023 11:00am
Thank you Lil! I appreciate feedback.
Thx for reading. Have a lovely morning.
Thx for reading. Have a lovely morning.
