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word message on death!
There was brightness
like the sun in his eyes,
there was tenderness
like a butterfly in his heart,
The stairs he had climbed
to settle down had become
a tomb of destruction for him.
His hands remained empty
throughout his life,
n today a grave has been dug
for those empty hands.
His life was infamous by
the name of beggar,
yet he used to worship
the name of God.
At last, heaving a long sigh,
he embraced the taunt of death
n there is no one to say
two words like flowers on his dusty grave!
like the sun in his eyes,
there was tenderness
like a butterfly in his heart,
The stairs he had climbed
to settle down had become
a tomb of destruction for him.
His hands remained empty
throughout his life,
n today a grave has been dug
for those empty hands.
His life was infamous by
the name of beggar,
yet he used to worship
the name of God.
At last, heaving a long sigh,
he embraced the taunt of death
n there is no one to say
two words like flowers on his dusty grave!
Published 3rd May 2023
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3rd May 2023 4:59pm
Hapless and desert feeling. Vast and small. Very good. I love the use of dark themes.
3rd May 2023 5:57pm
3rd May 2023 8:24pm
3rd May 2023 5:14pm
Seems tragic, like a null and void truth, realizing the end. The potential of the mind went to waste (I interpreted the "sun in eyes" and "empty hands" as such). Maybe he got caught up in pondering life, rather than living it - the wrong purpose in life. Some discourse of faith left his hands empty, because he had nothing to show for it. Not leaving a legacy, or even a romance. Maybe he was too selfish to let anyone in. Sucks, because he had a tender heart.
Lacking in spirit, the protagonist became known as a beggar, because his life was barren, and didn't believe in God anymore. An answer to fate, the same as anyone - death. His loneliness followed him to the grave.
Lacking in spirit, the protagonist became known as a beggar, because his life was barren, and didn't believe in God anymore. An answer to fate, the same as anyone - death. His loneliness followed him to the grave.
3rd May 2023 6:05pm
Yes, he came alone and went alone, there was no one to cry for him in this barren life. n yaa one wrong decision of a person turns the wheel of life. The man who sleeps under the chandelier of stars comes into the hut. Well thanks much for your nice feedback!
3rd May 2023 6:21pm
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4th May 2023 2:38am
4th May 2023 2:52am
Ohhhh
I'm sorry if you feel bad. but I'm glad too that you felt healing as well with my words,and yaa it seems that you are in a hospital. I hope your health is fine. Thank you once again for visiting me! Just take care of yourself man! N i wish get well soon!
I'm sorry if you feel bad. but I'm glad too that you felt healing as well with my words,and yaa it seems that you are in a hospital. I hope your health is fine. Thank you once again for visiting me! Just take care of yourself man! N i wish get well soon!
4th May 2023 5:55am
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27th May 2023 6:15am
Great write/read here :) Truly enjoyed though it is painfully sad in the message but as always seems to be the case with you, extraordinary writing. This has me reflect on my father, fits him. I have no idea if he is even alive anymore. He cut my brother and I out of his life a long time ago. But I can see him in this and to some extent I can see myself in this as well too which is something I am trying to work on within myself. As said, fantastic write :) Yours always are. Hope you are doing well :)
27th May 2023 6:25am
It is sad that you and your brother were cut out of your father's side. However, the child needs the warmth of both the mother and the father. Well I am glad that you read this and gave your feedback.. be happy!
