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Lost In Acronyms
Lost in the acronym's shadow
and antebellum chandeliers
of herbal thoughts and memories
with the scented blends of twilight
to sip a moment of silence
misting with the leaves' soft mellow
echoing the breath of Mona Lisa
touched by the Lights of Heaven
lost in the acronym's shadow
and antebellum chandeliers
of herbal thoughts and memories
with the scented blends of twilight
to sip a moment of silence
misting with the leaves' soft mellow
echoing the breath of Mona Lisa
touched by the Lights of Heaven
lost in the acronym's shadow
Published 13th Apr 2023
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Although your dough slices [Lost in the acronym's shadow] are rather thin, you pack a heavy sandwich between them. I am tempted to declare it an esoteric banquet, if only because your subtleties may elude the casual mind. In a literal sense, acronyms reveal only the thin slices of which they are composed on the outside, but if one could decipher the non-initial letters that constitute the filling, one would be amazed at what stands behind the tip of the iceberg.
On the other hand, all of your OBVIOUS poem would SEEM to represent merely the thin slices that shield the message in the graphic -- which is where one finds what COULD HAVE BEEN the real poem: Unfortunately, you are borrowing lines from "The Brides' Tragedy," written by Bryan Waller Procter—better known under his pseudonym of Barry Cornwall:
[say] "like the red outline of beginning ADAM"
Source: The Last Elizabethan
[Taken from Lytton Strachey's Books & Characters.]
I recommend that you declare the sources when you quote original material from other writers. What is the source of this part--
TEMPTATION COMES IN TWO
FORMS ONLY: THE LINEAR
AND THE CIRCULAR
BUT ALL TRUE GAMES
ARE VISIONS
AND TRUE VISION
IS RADIAL
Sincerely
cab
On the other hand, all of your OBVIOUS poem would SEEM to represent merely the thin slices that shield the message in the graphic -- which is where one finds what COULD HAVE BEEN the real poem: Unfortunately, you are borrowing lines from "The Brides' Tragedy," written by Bryan Waller Procter—better known under his pseudonym of Barry Cornwall:
[say] "like the red outline of beginning ADAM"
Source: The Last Elizabethan
[Taken from Lytton Strachey's Books & Characters.]
I recommend that you declare the sources when you quote original material from other writers. What is the source of this part--
TEMPTATION COMES IN TWO
FORMS ONLY: THE LINEAR
AND THE CIRCULAR
BUT ALL TRUE GAMES
ARE VISIONS
AND TRUE VISION
IS RADIAL
Sincerely
cab
