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Re. Night ride
9th Apr 2023 10:13pm
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Re. Night ride
10th Apr 2023 7:33am
Love the bringing in of that orthopaedic term in the first line."Sly femurs thrusting"
Can visualise the bedsheet having slipped down in the action: "Silk sheet shackles on my calves"
Could almost whoop "Ye-ha! at the last line: "Midnight ride is on".
I RL this - best picture of lovemaking in haiku I have read so far.
Can visualise the bedsheet having slipped down in the action: "Silk sheet shackles on my calves"
Could almost whoop "Ye-ha! at the last line: "Midnight ride is on".
I RL this - best picture of lovemaking in haiku I have read so far.
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Re: Re. Night ride
12th Apr 2023 5:32pm
Thank you for taking your time and writing this thorough comment. Means a lot. Best, PL.
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Re. Night ride
20th Aug 2023 5:27pm
Your poem is wonderful and interesting
I enjoyed reading it several times
Your poem forced me to write some verses :
"Night ride
Sly femurs thrusting,
it's a mess flooded with attraction.
Silk sheet shackles on her calves,
hit she hit she it struck her hard
Midnight ride is on.
Stripping she down,hearing her moan
Touching her body hearing her pleas
Biting her neck,caressing her body
Riding his pole she never felt better,
Midnight ride is on.
Riding it all night like a roller coaster
Hear her scream as he thrust -harder.
Moans softly as he fill she with cum
Her sexual cravings is fulfilled now,"
I enjoyed reading it several times
Your poem forced me to write some verses :
"Night ride
Sly femurs thrusting,
it's a mess flooded with attraction.
Silk sheet shackles on her calves,
hit she hit she it struck her hard
Midnight ride is on.
Stripping she down,hearing her moan
Touching her body hearing her pleas
Biting her neck,caressing her body
Riding his pole she never felt better,
Midnight ride is on.
Riding it all night like a roller coaster
Hear her scream as he thrust -harder.
Moans softly as he fill she with cum
Her sexual cravings is fulfilled now,"
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