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Insane Rage
I've insane rage inside it kills
O comfort me my Mother dear
Its wills will me to do self ills
I've insane rage inside it kills,
O mother mine please hold me still
gently gentle me free from fear
I've insane rage inside it kills
O comfort me my Mother dear.
This rage will will me underground
Dear gentle me with Mother love
down on Earth I am so hell bound
this rage will will me underground,
I might reach peace deep underground
I'm teetering, just one shove,
this rage will will me underground
Dear gentle me with mother love...
I called you came you comfort me
though rage still wills me underground
you gentled me to let it be
I called you came you comfort me,
those future years I feared you see
I wasn't shoved I just jumped down
you called I came you comfort me
together now, deep underground...
O comfort me my Mother dear
Its wills will me to do self ills
I've insane rage inside it kills,
O mother mine please hold me still
gently gentle me free from fear
I've insane rage inside it kills
O comfort me my Mother dear.
This rage will will me underground
Dear gentle me with Mother love
down on Earth I am so hell bound
this rage will will me underground,
I might reach peace deep underground
I'm teetering, just one shove,
this rage will will me underground
Dear gentle me with mother love...
I called you came you comfort me
though rage still wills me underground
you gentled me to let it be
I called you came you comfort me,
those future years I feared you see
I wasn't shoved I just jumped down
you called I came you comfort me
together now, deep underground...
Published 14th Jan 2023
| Edited 1st Sep 2023
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A trio of triolets.
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15th Jan 2023 1:59am
You've got a great ear, but now I'm wondering if "Deep Underground" is where poets and poems go to die.
Is that a comment on the nature of this website, or the craft in general?
Is that a comment on the nature of this website, or the craft in general?
15th Jan 2023 7:02am
Cheers MS. Thank you kindly for the read & comment.
As to the bit of comment ' go to die ' I never thought of that.
When this was written I'd never heard of DU and this one was pulled out for Robert's comp and laziness left it as it is. The DU, in this piece, is meant to be the grave.
But I suppose that bit needs editing out.
The whole piece is meant to be a frantic appeal to some ' mother ' more imagined than real but it seemed to fit Robert's comp so there it is. For what it's worth.
But the whole is unique. imo.
As to the bit of comment ' go to die ' I never thought of that.
When this was written I'd never heard of DU and this one was pulled out for Robert's comp and laziness left it as it is. The DU, in this piece, is meant to be the grave.
But I suppose that bit needs editing out.
The whole piece is meant to be a frantic appeal to some ' mother ' more imagined than real but it seemed to fit Robert's comp so there it is. For what it's worth.
But the whole is unique. imo.
18th Jan 2023 2:51pm
Hello dear Rew: yes, it fits the comp perfectly and I love it. Kisses, Robert.
18th Jan 2023 3:21pm
