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Shell
On her
Birthday
she peeks out
the breeze
tickling her
nose
she flushes,
thinks
‘I am not ready
for this world’
and folds
into herself once more.
Published 6th Oct 2022
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6th Oct 2022 4:25pm
Love this... the short lines... tentative... along with the irregular cadence of the flow... perfect couplet for an ending...
7th Oct 2022 5:10pm
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7th Oct 2022 1:57am
The revelation and execution of this piece impact me very deeply Ursa...
Wonderful work...
Wonderful work...
7th Oct 2022 5:11pm
8th Oct 2022 4:02pm
The season to hibernate.
The world can be a scary place at times. The fast pace, decisions, health, scammers, etc. make one want to stay in their shell. Hugs!
The world can be a scary place at times. The fast pace, decisions, health, scammers, etc. make one want to stay in their shell. Hugs!
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14th Oct 2022 5:09am
Dear U,
You have collected my thoughts on the matter of beginning each day brilliantly. Love this. H🌷
You have collected my thoughts on the matter of beginning each day brilliantly. Love this. H🌷
9th Dec 2022 5:22am
It's hard to explain anxiety to someone who doesn't have anxiety. I'd say you've done well here.
15th Feb 2023 8:07am
23rd Mar 2024 3:52am
This piece of poetry beautifully captures a moment of introspection and vulnerability. The imagery of the birthday celebrant peeking out into the world, feeling the breeze tickle her nose, and then retreating back into herself is evocative and relatable. The metaphor of folding into oneself suggests a sense of protection or retreat from the overwhelming aspects of existence, perhaps hinting at the complexities and uncertainties of life. Overall, it's a poignant reflection on the human experience of navigating one's place in the world, particularly on occasions of personal significance like birthdays.
