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Seated
Slicing deep inside
the pelvis; the bladder
the uterus inflamed
I suppose, maybe
‘what could it have been?’
harried hormones,
or too much (or dirty) sex,
kisses from laden pets,
sweat pooled at my hollow
sat on my bike too long
to decompress, something
I ate, drank or sniffed..
who cares?
I breathe shallow now,
allow for more space
my distention visible I race
to the toilet, relief for
one moment and only
for one trickle.
the pelvis; the bladder
the uterus inflamed
I suppose, maybe
‘what could it have been?’
harried hormones,
or too much (or dirty) sex,
kisses from laden pets,
sweat pooled at my hollow
sat on my bike too long
to decompress, something
I ate, drank or sniffed..
who cares?
I breathe shallow now,
allow for more space
my distention visible I race
to the toilet, relief for
one moment and only
for one trickle.
Published 19th Oct 2022
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19th Oct 2022 4:46pm
Wait for your poem Ursa
As usual in your poems, your topics are important
We enjoy every time you write
Don't leave us waiting too long
Greetings to you
MP
As usual in your poems, your topics are important
We enjoy every time you write
Don't leave us waiting too long
Greetings to you
MP
20th Oct 2022 2:30am
MP, Greeting to you too, and thank you for the lovely comment.
I appreciate you.
warmly,
ursa 💜
I appreciate you.
warmly,
ursa 💜
19th Oct 2022 6:42pm
Dear U,
Describing pain can be tricky. You’ve masterfully done it. If this is personal I wish you well and very speedily. Great write despite the pain. H🌷
Describing pain can be tricky. You’ve masterfully done it. If this is personal I wish you well and very speedily. Great write despite the pain. H🌷
20th Oct 2022 2:33am
Dear H, thank you! This is personal, the pain is real.
And when we feel our pain it can be so isolating..
Thank you for your well wishes, thank you for your comment.
warmly,
ursa 💜
And when we feel our pain it can be so isolating..
Thank you for your well wishes, thank you for your comment.
warmly,
ursa 💜
19th Oct 2022 6:53pm
Oh, I’m feeling this one so much. I have one kidney, and arthritis, so yeah… I’m finding lots of relatable stuff in here.
What I loved about this piece is the honest perspective of the female voice. There’s not enough of that in poetry, so I can only applaud and commend you for that.
Thank you for sharing this. It was brave, and I always appreciate brave.
-M
What I loved about this piece is the honest perspective of the female voice. There’s not enough of that in poetry, so I can only applaud and commend you for that.
Thank you for sharing this. It was brave, and I always appreciate brave.
-M
20th Oct 2022 2:38am
20th Oct 2022 2:02pm
I agree with M, no way I could have said that any better. I'm digging this piece.
LJ
LJ
20th Oct 2022 8:58pm
23rd Mar 2024 3:49am
This poem captures a raw and intimate exploration of physical discomfort and introspection. The imagery of slicing deep inside the pelvis and the inflamed uterus paints a vivid picture of pain and discomfort. The speaker's contemplation of the potential causes, whether it be hormonal, sexual, environmental, or dietary, adds layers of complexity to the experience.
The repetition of "who cares?" emphasizes a sense of resignation or indifference to the cause, suggesting a focus on finding relief rather than dwelling on the origin of the discomfort. The urgency conveyed through "racing to the toilet" and the fleeting nature of relief with "only for one trickle" speaks to the relentlessness of the physical symptoms and the longing for respite.
Overall, the poem delves into the physical and emotional aspects of bodily discomfort, inviting readers to reflect on their own experiences of pain and the ways in which they cope with it.
The repetition of "who cares?" emphasizes a sense of resignation or indifference to the cause, suggesting a focus on finding relief rather than dwelling on the origin of the discomfort. The urgency conveyed through "racing to the toilet" and the fleeting nature of relief with "only for one trickle" speaks to the relentlessness of the physical symptoms and the longing for respite.
Overall, the poem delves into the physical and emotional aspects of bodily discomfort, inviting readers to reflect on their own experiences of pain and the ways in which they cope with it.
