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Ad space for the brain dead
Flecks of color amid the gray wash
Rivers once formidable now only bothersome
Steel and concrete
Voices shouting
WAKE UP! an advertising sign screams silently
Still unheard a man jangles for change on a street corner
While church doors hang wide begging charity
Hockey games and unspoken rivalries
Except on national T.V
Bike shops, bus stops
Messengers and a mail box
Highways to by ways
But no one knows the right way
Got Junk?
Emotional maybe
Bentley's, all the baggage you'll never need
Oh please, words flow in chorus
Dramatic gestures following fluid as trained actors
Therapy is the way for me
Why not with M.D degrees being handed out like fortune cookies
No real complaints until you find yourself on Dr. Fill in the blank
Listening with glazed eyes as they doles out advice like Opera
Glass half full until its pushed off the metaphorical table
But how does that make you feel?
It's all become to much now
As directed on the back packaging
Please recycle your brain matter
They may need the ad space
Rivers once formidable now only bothersome
Steel and concrete
Voices shouting
WAKE UP! an advertising sign screams silently
Still unheard a man jangles for change on a street corner
While church doors hang wide begging charity
Hockey games and unspoken rivalries
Except on national T.V
Bike shops, bus stops
Messengers and a mail box
Highways to by ways
But no one knows the right way
Got Junk?
Emotional maybe
Bentley's, all the baggage you'll never need
Oh please, words flow in chorus
Dramatic gestures following fluid as trained actors
Therapy is the way for me
Why not with M.D degrees being handed out like fortune cookies
No real complaints until you find yourself on Dr. Fill in the blank
Listening with glazed eyes as they doles out advice like Opera
Glass half full until its pushed off the metaphorical table
But how does that make you feel?
It's all become to much now
As directed on the back packaging
Please recycle your brain matter
They may need the ad space
Published 27th Mar 2012
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Really liked this one, some clever wording in there and also some interesting thoughts upon society and the masses.
Certainly some insights for those that see them, and also something for each reader to pick up upon and interpret for themselves.
Keep up the good work.
Certainly some insights for those that see them, and also something for each reader to pick up upon and interpret for themselves.
Keep up the good work.
27th Mar 2012 2:49am
thank you much is my love I'm glad you liked it so much I was really hoping to make a splash with this considering that nearly everything now a days is plastered in ads for every sort of thing imaginable
27th Mar 2012 2:57am
27th Mar 2012 7:27pm
nice! "please recycle brain matter..." I really liked that line!
but that said CrypticX is right this was very cleverly put together and I can't help but chuckle at some of the puns in this more sersious toned piece of work.
There was just one line I stumbled on while reading and it was "...with M.D degrees been handed out like fortune cookies" I think it might have worked better with "being" or maybe "that are" or something of that sort. Aside from that though the rest went together rather nicely
but that said CrypticX is right this was very cleverly put together and I can't help but chuckle at some of the puns in this more sersious toned piece of work.
There was just one line I stumbled on while reading and it was "...with M.D degrees been handed out like fortune cookies" I think it might have worked better with "being" or maybe "that are" or something of that sort. Aside from that though the rest went together rather nicely
27th Mar 2012 7:59pm
thanks nameless your right it does flow better now and I am glad I could amuse you so in this ad infested world
28th Mar 2012 10:16pm
