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40 Dollar Room
I once danced naked for her
in a 40 dollar room
Moving with precision/
moved by the symphonies of her grace
Our love razor sharp
If she had sliced my soul wide open at that point
with the sharp scalpel of her eyes
I would not have flinched
Just to be there wide open
Just to be her child of that precise moment
She watched intently, bemused with that smile
thin and sweet like a chocolate wafer
I fell to the bed drunk and dizzy
on sex and candlelight and
the magic of that room
I feel openly into her tender horizons
I had moved freely beyond the limits
of my flesh
I cried like a night sky weeping
moving then within the galaxies of her grace
in a 40 dollar room
Moving with precision/
moved by the symphonies of her grace
Our love razor sharp
If she had sliced my soul wide open at that point
with the sharp scalpel of her eyes
I would not have flinched
Just to be there wide open
Just to be her child of that precise moment
She watched intently, bemused with that smile
thin and sweet like a chocolate wafer
I fell to the bed drunk and dizzy
on sex and candlelight and
the magic of that room
I feel openly into her tender horizons
I had moved freely beyond the limits
of my flesh
I cried like a night sky weeping
moving then within the galaxies of her grace
Published 25th Mar 2012
| Edited 26th Mar 2012
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Anonymous
26th Mar 2012 00:34am
This is really good and I can picture the scene. I will add an editing tip or two-It's great, Peace xx
I think you mean I had moved freely beyond -THE limits
I would separate night and sky
do you always mean feel, or at times mean Fell? (I don't know)xx Peacex
I think you mean I had moved freely beyond -THE limits
I would separate night and sky
do you always mean feel, or at times mean Fell? (I don't know)xx Peacex
26th Mar 2012 5:21am
