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If I Die Tomorrow
If I die tomorrow, if I
Never wake again,
What part of me, follows you forever?
Unforgiven sins
And all that lies beneath my skin?
What would you say,
If I never woke again?
Would you hold my heart inside
A death grip till your fingers
Turned bloody, black and blue?
Would you retrace those steps
Of yours over and over again,
So I'll never be out of reach?
Would you believe my heartbeat's a lie,
To only fool the sky?
If I never woke again..
Would you be on the otherside?
Never wake again,
What part of me, follows you forever?
Unforgiven sins
And all that lies beneath my skin?
What would you say,
If I never woke again?
Would you hold my heart inside
A death grip till your fingers
Turned bloody, black and blue?
Would you retrace those steps
Of yours over and over again,
So I'll never be out of reach?
Would you believe my heartbeat's a lie,
To only fool the sky?
If I never woke again..
Would you be on the otherside?
Published 20th Mar 2012
| Edited 8th Mar 2013
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7th Mar 2013 3:55am
strong emotion and transfer of your intentions... all cap's? ;( really? n allll the commas n periods..... super juvinile! many readers may swash past just @ the meare cite of such abuse! STILL! very strong none the less the words are with out failure! soften your presentataion and empower the them even more! keep grindin
7th Mar 2013 4:37am
Thanks for the feed back. Im glad you liked it. And that is my format of writing, I love my proper grammar and punctuation.
8th Mar 2013 00:00am
there is nothing proper about ur grammar! that's the point! u shud check some references and rethink ur approach! jus sayin...
8th Mar 2013 5:23am
I'm sorry, but the way you're spelling everything is incorrect.. Let me help with that.
There* Your* You* Should* Your* Just* Saying*
If you're going to say I don't have proper grammar and punctuation, you may want to at least spell everything correctly. Because it won't make you look any smarter if you spell words incorrectly.
There* Your* You* Should* Your* Just* Saying*
If you're going to say I don't have proper grammar and punctuation, you may want to at least spell everything correctly. Because it won't make you look any smarter if you spell words incorrectly.
9th Mar 2013 2:53am
take the critique r don't. txt speak has nothin 2 do with my ability to recognize raw, unguided word execises. good luck n keep grindin
11th Mar 2013 4:39am
Right.. -_-* That's my format, that's proper grammar and puncutation. Get over that. When I ask for critique, I mean the writing, the story that's being told, not the damned format.
