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What does that make you?
I dig deep into the pits of my soul,
I want to conjure the words to describe the world.
My heart blackened,
My mind so warped,
My body criticized,
Society reprimands.
I look into the mirror,
I cringe at what I see,
My life becomes much clearer,
It builds inside of me.
You judge me constantly,
I hear it every day,
No regard for individuality,
I feel myself breaking away.
I know you suffer too,
Look through empathetic eyes,
What does that make you?
I want to conjure the words to describe the world.
My heart blackened,
My mind so warped,
My body criticized,
Society reprimands.
I look into the mirror,
I cringe at what I see,
My life becomes much clearer,
It builds inside of me.
You judge me constantly,
I hear it every day,
No regard for individuality,
I feel myself breaking away.
I know you suffer too,
Look through empathetic eyes,
What does that make you?
Published 19th Mar 2012
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Anonymous
19th Mar 2012 3:40am
Hi, and welcome. in my humble opinion-You have a lot of talent and a mind that is witty enough to convey it-I sense a slightly underdeveloped flow-and a little fine tuning should make this awesome!
Keep writing! Thank You.
Keep writing! Thank You.
19th Mar 2012 7:22pm
Your quite right a stranger would be honest, and honestly you have bags of talent, I can't wait to read more...
Great poem btw.....
Great poem btw.....
