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Stream of Unconsciousness
It's no proper thing for a man
To suffer mentation too mild
When he might ponder a planet span
Searching for notions born to be wild
Among the jungles of metaphor
On Miracle-Gro banks of a stream
With myriad vine and leaf to explore
Through frondescent trails of a dream...
Meandering through all our thoughts
Which come and go all day and night
Like intermittent forget-me-nots
Under a wayward honeybee flight
Hoping to find, like pollen in heaps,
A fancy as fine as those when he sleeps.
To suffer mentation too mild
When he might ponder a planet span
Searching for notions born to be wild
Among the jungles of metaphor
On Miracle-Gro banks of a stream
With myriad vine and leaf to explore
Through frondescent trails of a dream...
Meandering through all our thoughts
Which come and go all day and night
Like intermittent forget-me-nots
Under a wayward honeybee flight
Hoping to find, like pollen in heaps,
A fancy as fine as those when he sleeps.
Published 30th May 2022
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30th May 2022 10:09pm
Putting one's mind to balance is such a difficult and tedious task / goal / whatever it even is. This described the stream / flow / chaos?? of thoughts so well. I really dislike dreams for quite the decent while now.
" forget-me-nots" really stuck a cord in me for some reason. A very good expression for sure.
This poem reminds me of a dandelion.
Isn't out (un)consciousness exactly like a dandelion, at least.. now...?
" forget-me-nots" really stuck a cord in me for some reason. A very good expression for sure.
This poem reminds me of a dandelion.
Isn't out (un)consciousness exactly like a dandelion, at least.. now...?
31st May 2022 1:08am
I was thinking that thoughts "bloom" somewhat like the way a flower does, and that poetry is akin to a bee collecting pollen therefrom. Later on, another flower blooms from that pollen and then another bee...and so on, and so on. So yes, I don't know why it wouldn't be like a dandelion, and the mind, of the poet at least, keeps functioning whether it is asleep or not, so that when you wake up you have more material for your next poem. Each individual poet reorienting the thought products like pollen in a beehive or mulling sweets in a mortar and pestle.
Your own dreams may be disturbing, but still be the key ingredients for a successful poem. A valid form of therapy to be sure.
Your own dreams may be disturbing, but still be the key ingredients for a successful poem. A valid form of therapy to be sure.
