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Talentless
You’ve bragged about how talented you are
in writing poetry
and how you ably imitate, rehearse,
and duplicate so easily
with great elan,
far better than all the present would- be poets can,
the styles in which the “golden ones”
like Byron, Shelley, Yeats,
and even good old Will himself,
set out their verse,
and fain, if you were so inclined,
could take and make,
the subjects that they doted on
your own to dwell
and write upon.
And yet, so far as I can see,
you’ve never really tried you hand
at scribing a submission
close resembling what they penned
when they, with gusto and with fervency
indited what they often,
rightly,
thought to be
a poet’s foremost purpose and his aim
in writing verse
i.e., to put a hex
on members of the gentle sex
and woo, entwine and daze them with
the composition of electric words aligned
in such a way
that made them want to rush into
those poets’ arms and know their ravashings.
I wonder why
you’ve ner’re produced some poems of this kind,
or even when that you attempted to,
you’ve failed quite miserably
to be successful in the enterprise.
The answer is, I ken, an easy one.
In this poetic realm you’re talent-less.
You haven’t the ability
to craft the phrases and the imagery
or any of the kinds of verbal rapturing
within a poem’s lines
that have the power to induce
let alone seduce
a woman into breathlessness,
elating her to aching sighs
for want of your embrace.
No doubt you will respond to this
by saying that your reason for not writing pieces steeped
in potent and persuasive sensuality
is not that your composing them is far beyond
what bardic skills you have.
Oh no, you’ll claim. That’s patently not true!
It’s just that it is not the sort of thing that men,
acculturated as you are, would do
or would find worth their while.
But listen now.
That whirring sound you hear
is Rumi and Qabbani spinning in their graves,
so spurred by how you cover up
your vast incompetence,
to rise with sore intent
to tell you this:
“Now if you think that heated poetry
whose subject is the joy
of carnal love is a something Middle Eastern men
would not be happy explore
and never should on public paper pen,
then you’re a bumbling self-excusing knave
Another thing of which we’re sure
is that, when you make claims that you possess
as other’s don’t
the grand facility to write things
that will endure through time,
you are little more
than just a rank poseur.
In fact, from what we’ve seen
of your oeuvre
you’re hardly worthy even to be classified
an “amateur “
since you don’t show yourself
in any way proficient in the bardic art
or versed well enough in it
to do just what it is
good versifiers do
and that’s to write a piece
that is so truly sensual
that it will set a woman’s heart
on fire”
So can you prove them wrong?
My money’s on the answer “No”.
In light of how you always write
in manned style that’s dull,
all tell, not show and shows awareness none
of how the sensual in verse is spun,
The chances that you’re able to,
are minuscule and dire.,
The chances that you’re able to,
are minuscule and dire.
in writing poetry
and how you ably imitate, rehearse,
and duplicate so easily
with great elan,
far better than all the present would- be poets can,
the styles in which the “golden ones”
like Byron, Shelley, Yeats,
and even good old Will himself,
set out their verse,
and fain, if you were so inclined,
could take and make,
the subjects that they doted on
your own to dwell
and write upon.
And yet, so far as I can see,
you’ve never really tried you hand
at scribing a submission
close resembling what they penned
when they, with gusto and with fervency
indited what they often,
rightly,
thought to be
a poet’s foremost purpose and his aim
in writing verse
i.e., to put a hex
on members of the gentle sex
and woo, entwine and daze them with
the composition of electric words aligned
in such a way
that made them want to rush into
those poets’ arms and know their ravashings.
I wonder why
you’ve ner’re produced some poems of this kind,
or even when that you attempted to,
you’ve failed quite miserably
to be successful in the enterprise.
The answer is, I ken, an easy one.
In this poetic realm you’re talent-less.
You haven’t the ability
to craft the phrases and the imagery
or any of the kinds of verbal rapturing
within a poem’s lines
that have the power to induce
let alone seduce
a woman into breathlessness,
elating her to aching sighs
for want of your embrace.
No doubt you will respond to this
by saying that your reason for not writing pieces steeped
in potent and persuasive sensuality
is not that your composing them is far beyond
what bardic skills you have.
Oh no, you’ll claim. That’s patently not true!
It’s just that it is not the sort of thing that men,
acculturated as you are, would do
or would find worth their while.
But listen now.
That whirring sound you hear
is Rumi and Qabbani spinning in their graves,
so spurred by how you cover up
your vast incompetence,
to rise with sore intent
to tell you this:
“Now if you think that heated poetry
whose subject is the joy
of carnal love is a something Middle Eastern men
would not be happy explore
and never should on public paper pen,
then you’re a bumbling self-excusing knave
Another thing of which we’re sure
is that, when you make claims that you possess
as other’s don’t
the grand facility to write things
that will endure through time,
you are little more
than just a rank poseur.
In fact, from what we’ve seen
of your oeuvre
you’re hardly worthy even to be classified
an “amateur “
since you don’t show yourself
in any way proficient in the bardic art
or versed well enough in it
to do just what it is
good versifiers do
and that’s to write a piece
that is so truly sensual
that it will set a woman’s heart
on fire”
So can you prove them wrong?
My money’s on the answer “No”.
In light of how you always write
in manned style that’s dull,
all tell, not show and shows awareness none
of how the sensual in verse is spun,
The chances that you’re able to,
are minuscule and dire.,
The chances that you’re able to,
are minuscule and dire.
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