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I Dream Awake
When I walk
I sleep
I recall your voice
I try to keep
its talk
so sweet
I just can't wait
to meet
the apple maid
in the valley
of an offbeat
to stray
down your one way
street
come what may
we can stand elite
there is no pay
its all for free
I'm awake
in our dream to be
I'm your cake
your the cream
of me
the world may quake
but you'll not shake me
others can take their
fakery
theres a sky of rouge
in eternity
love light pools
on a solar kissed tree
a sunset prism
rains its colourful glee
magical dust covers
you and me
so place some trust
in our possibility .
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Published 30th Jan 2010
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Anonymous
30th Jan 2010 9:41pm
Effortlessly constructed, sweepingly beautiful love poem related with undeniable ease and skill. The scattered rhyme really boosted the narrative train and the verse was stuffed with beauteous lyrical gems. "Apple maid"; "solar kissed tree"; "sunset prism"; all these were, well, fantastic. The final full stop was a little unecessary though, considering that there is no other punctuation used. You're perhaps one of the most interesting love writers I've see so far on this site.
30th Jan 2010 9:46pm
What an honour to hear that from you Jack thankyou very much thats made my day :)
31st Jan 2010 00:44am
this was the best rhyming poem i read beside Dr. sues lmaoo love it awesome job
