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SoBe without Çamlica is a glass half-empty
I see a drink that I took
from the fridge sitting
on the counter
unopened
and I realize
it's an abandoned thought
that I've finally
come back to
but only when it was convenient
for me
and I wonder if it's actually too late
perhaps the drink will still taste the same but
the setting
the time
the moment
has changed
I left that thought on the counter
and when I finally came back to it
it had already moved on
to something better
and that is for the best.
from the fridge sitting
on the counter
unopened
and I realize
it's an abandoned thought
that I've finally
come back to
but only when it was convenient
for me
and I wonder if it's actually too late
perhaps the drink will still taste the same but
the setting
the time
the moment
has changed
I left that thought on the counter
and when I finally came back to it
it had already moved on
to something better
and that is for the best.
Published 8th Mar 2012
| Edited 21st Mar 2012
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19th Mar 2012 6:36pm
I know a lot of people who believe in not editing what they write after that night because they don't want to alter it in a different state of mind... My personal belief? I don't care whether it tastes like my original thought, only that it tastes the best I can make it taste. I like this imagery a lot, it fits well, and the style fits the thought. Not sure what to make of the title though, or how it adds to the impact of the poem. Aside from that, solid work here.
