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Fractured Memories
night
icy rain
the choppy surface of the sea
the smell of salt in the air
a guy like myself dressed in an anorak like mine
standing by the railings with a mobile phone
talking
I have hazy recollections of waking up from a nightmare with a shout and heading down to the promenade in the early hours of the morning, shivering from the cold and smoking a cigarette by the railings as I watch the sea in the distance, a huge mass that breathes in the dark
icy rain
the choppy surface of the sea
the smell of salt in the air
a guy like myself dressed in an anorak like mine
standing by the railings with a mobile phone
talking
I have hazy recollections of waking up from a nightmare with a shout and heading down to the promenade in the early hours of the morning, shivering from the cold and smoking a cigarette by the railings as I watch the sea in the distance, a huge mass that breathes in the dark
Published 17th Jan 2022
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18th Jan 2022 00:19am
18th Jan 2022 11:13pm
Thanks. Yes, you're right, Paul. There are elements of this in me - thankfully, a lot more controlled now.
18th Jan 2022 8:39am
18th Jan 2022 10:56pm
18th Jan 2022 1:07pm
Very dear Lozzamus,
It's a very beautiful scene, and idea. I love your poetry and l have missed it for sometime.
It's a very beautiful scene, and idea. I love your poetry and l have missed it for sometime.
18th Jan 2022 10:50pm
Many thanks, Joseph, for such kind comments. I've been so busy, but am trying to get more poetry out there. I hope you are well,
Lawrence
Lawrence
26th Jan 2022 00:15am
Hey there, Lawrence
As a reader, I love the ideas that are left swirling in my head, as to where this may lead.... such wonderful potential, indeed. The atmosphere you are able to cleverly convey with just that little installment of writing knocks my socks off... I hope you're able to continue it and add to to it, at some point.....
I very much enjoyed the mystery!
🌹 - B
As a reader, I love the ideas that are left swirling in my head, as to where this may lead.... such wonderful potential, indeed. The atmosphere you are able to cleverly convey with just that little installment of writing knocks my socks off... I hope you're able to continue it and add to to it, at some point.....
I very much enjoyed the mystery!
🌹 - B
26th Jan 2022 9:22pm
Thanks very much, Bluevelvete.
Yes, I bounced my writings around publishers and agents. Many thought the writing and story telling were polished, but didn't feel they could market my work. I would love to share more here, though.
Yes, I bounced my writings around publishers and agents. Many thought the writing and story telling were polished, but didn't feel they could market my work. I would love to share more here, though.
