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infinite cog
in the morning
past the fog
luminous days
inevitable slog
windy dreams
desperate pleas
how can i
be at peace?
forgive me sun
for i have learned
how to live
beyond your burn
in a cave
past the trees
i sleep at last
buried in leaves
i long for earth
the cool damp spell
coiled in mud
beyond my hell
the light of day
beckons my strife
the days too long
to avoid my life
release at last
my ambitious breath
the wheel has used you
to quicken my death
past the fog
luminous days
inevitable slog
windy dreams
desperate pleas
how can i
be at peace?
forgive me sun
for i have learned
how to live
beyond your burn
in a cave
past the trees
i sleep at last
buried in leaves
i long for earth
the cool damp spell
coiled in mud
beyond my hell
the light of day
beckons my strife
the days too long
to avoid my life
release at last
my ambitious breath
the wheel has used you
to quicken my death
Published 2nd Jan 2022
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2nd Jan 2022 3:54pm
2nd Jan 2022 5:27pm
2nd Jan 2022 7:26pm
First let me welcome you to DUP.
This poem embraces the darkness that has engulfed you. You convey your despair and even wish for a permanent end. Like an injured animal you hide, hoping to have the time to heal. The hiding, you hope, protects you from life's predators. Your poem shows you have a spark, and you have talent. You may avoid the sun's shine, but your spark will light the darkness, and like fire scare the predators. Hopefully you'll see a path to hope. A PG rated virtual hug for you. Although named Typicaldoom, I don't think it's your fate. - Leo
This poem embraces the darkness that has engulfed you. You convey your despair and even wish for a permanent end. Like an injured animal you hide, hoping to have the time to heal. The hiding, you hope, protects you from life's predators. Your poem shows you have a spark, and you have talent. You may avoid the sun's shine, but your spark will light the darkness, and like fire scare the predators. Hopefully you'll see a path to hope. A PG rated virtual hug for you. Although named Typicaldoom, I don't think it's your fate. - Leo
2nd Jan 2022 9:20pm
thank you!! you analyzed it perfectly :D and lol we’ll see what fate has in store for me
