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my body is a shape
of grandness unfulfilled
a somatic mind
filled with puzzling years
of knots and barbs
wrinkled weeps
yet erect with a belief in the nobility of ache
and the pruning of humility
like bonsai
is proof of intent
and yet I stand eaten by pirañas
my bones still upright
mending to remaining bits of a soul devoured
still trying to help decipher
what blind eyes choose to see
selflessness as a mirage
need as weakness rather than spice
indistinguishable from the noise
of constant storms
the tsunami of expectation
blurring all vision
as i lose grip sometimes
of the delusion
that i am somehow great
unsure as to which is truly grand
“greatness” or the freeness of its insistence
of grandness unfulfilled
a somatic mind
filled with puzzling years
of knots and barbs
wrinkled weeps
yet erect with a belief in the nobility of ache
and the pruning of humility
like bonsai
is proof of intent
and yet I stand eaten by pirañas
my bones still upright
mending to remaining bits of a soul devoured
still trying to help decipher
what blind eyes choose to see
selflessness as a mirage
need as weakness rather than spice
indistinguishable from the noise
of constant storms
the tsunami of expectation
blurring all vision
as i lose grip sometimes
of the delusion
that i am somehow great
unsure as to which is truly grand
“greatness” or the freeness of its insistence
Published 4th Dec 2021
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is it a mirage....?... Has one of my long standing dreams come true?.....Were my immediate thoughts, upon seeing your published poem notification.... lol
To say I'm excited to read a new poem of yours, is a definite understatement. Especially when it's as gorgeously written and relatablly profound, as I've found this one to be.
I will be mulling over your line "yet erect with a belief in the nobility of ache" for a seriously long time, dear poet.
This piece speaks to me and certain questions that sometimes plague my own thoughts...
You have this very in tune, distinct way of writing, which deeply affects some primordial emotional awareness within me and prods that particular nerve to flare, so perfectly..... you always have, it seems.
Perhaps we're just cut from similar cloth....?!?...
Regardless, it's a true joy and pleasure you see your return. I am hoping that it's for a good while... as you're a rarity among poets, here.
Much love and appreciation,
🌹 - B
x
To say I'm excited to read a new poem of yours, is a definite understatement. Especially when it's as gorgeously written and relatablly profound, as I've found this one to be.
I will be mulling over your line "yet erect with a belief in the nobility of ache" for a seriously long time, dear poet.
This piece speaks to me and certain questions that sometimes plague my own thoughts...
You have this very in tune, distinct way of writing, which deeply affects some primordial emotional awareness within me and prods that particular nerve to flare, so perfectly..... you always have, it seems.
Perhaps we're just cut from similar cloth....?!?...
Regardless, it's a true joy and pleasure you see your return. I am hoping that it's for a good while... as you're a rarity among poets, here.
Much love and appreciation,
🌹 - B
x
5th Dec 2021 11:57am
hi Blue!
awww, thank you for those kind words...appreciate your reading and comments...sorry i havent been able to reciprocate much lately but i hope you are well.
awww, thank you for those kind words...appreciate your reading and comments...sorry i havent been able to reciprocate much lately but i hope you are well.
5th Dec 2021 1:30am
5th Dec 2021 11:58am
haha, thank you SO...yeah, i do love that idea of body as mind and vice versa.
5th Dec 2021 11:59am
5th Dec 2021 12:01pm
oh it's a great and wonderful word - used much in neuroscience these days. look it up, very rich for poets too :).
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15th Jan 2022 7:02pm
thank you much ld - hope you found being lost enjoyable :). appreciate the read.
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