How I Wish It Were So

How can you write about such a holy, secret subject in such a cheap, public way? You astonish me. Is this the language of a mature man?

"How can you write about such a holy, secret subject in such a cheap, public way?"  
 
I'd be grateful if you'd demonstrate not only that writing about  the pleasure of lovemaking is a secret subject and that to do so publicly is blasphemy,   but that I've written about it in a cheap way.   Until then, no one has reason to take your evaluation of my submission seriously and your prudery as THE guide to what is and what isn't a suitable subject for poetry and what is and what isn't "cheap" language.  
   
"You astonish me. Is this the language of a mature man?"  
   
It is the language of John Donne, Algernon Charles Swinburne, Audre Lorde, Robert Herrick, Constantine Cavafy, D.H. Lawrence, T.S. Eliot, W.H. Auden, Theodore Roethke, Robert Graves, Octavio Paz, Joseph Brodsky,  Frederico Garcia Lorca, Percy Bysshe Shelley, and Rainer Maria Rilke among many others.  
   
So yes.   It is such language.    
 
I wonder if your reaction to my piece is born from the fact that you didn't like the way it aroused you.  
 
I also wonder whether anyone here shares your puritanical opinion that erotic poetry- which you have never shown you can write (cue a statement from you along the lines of "I would never want to write erotic poetry")- should not be posted on an open forum and thinks that my submission is  "astonishing" in a bad way,  filled with cheap language, and has no poetic worth.

“how it would halt her breath
and make her inarticulate
and open-mouthed
and seeking mine…”

Oh. That’s just absolutely breathtaking…😇🙏

Thank you.  But in praising these lines in my submission you run the risk of being charged by J-Z with having no sense of what poetry is or what something  written in a beautiful style looks like as well as encouraging me to continue writing things that are blasphemous and cheaply worded!

For, after all, he has claimed over and over that I do not know how to write.  So it follows that people who think I do know something about this must not be critically astute or in any way informed about what constitutes poetry.

Baldwin, each person has his own taste and opinion, and he is free to admire anything he likes, but my opinion doesn't agree with yours. I am not against anyone who likes your poetry.

"Baldwin, each person has his own taste and opinion, and he is free to admire anything he likes, but my opinion doesn't agree with yours."

But your evaluations of my writing abilities  are never stated as only opinions,  but as objective and indisputable truths.

"I am not against anyone who likes your poetry."

Which means that you don't believe in what you say  about my ability to write well and are unaware or in denial of the logical import and implications of what you say about it means for anyone who states that I write well.

In any case,  how is any of this a fulfillment of my request to demonstrate the validity of your claim that I wrote about something that should be kept in secret,  used cheap language to do so, and was not the language that is/was  used by mature men?

It's what you are famous for -- i.e., dodging important questions about things you've claimed.

A visualisable scene of consensuality painted here.