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Broken
it's these moments
that I find the hardest
when the sun
decends into the universe
and the moon
reveals her face
the darkness
casts its shadows
upon my scars
upon my brokenness
these feelings
I swallow down
like nails
they cut
the depths of me
why do I surrender
to the thoughts
and let them
completely take over
EVERYTHING
is suffocating me
my walls
are closing in
I can't see
I can't feel
I can't breathe
that I find the hardest
when the sun
decends into the universe
and the moon
reveals her face
the darkness
casts its shadows
upon my scars
upon my brokenness
these feelings
I swallow down
like nails
they cut
the depths of me
why do I surrender
to the thoughts
and let them
completely take over
EVERYTHING
is suffocating me
my walls
are closing in
I can't see
I can't feel
I can't breathe
Published 10th Oct 2021
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10th Oct 2021 2:21am
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10th Oct 2021 2:25am
10th Oct 2021 2:50am
This pretty much describes how I feel right now. Strange how we must suffer and love is so difficult to find.
10th Oct 2021 2:55am
10th Oct 2021 4:54am
Dear J,
So relatable. You’ve done a remarkable job in describing the airless feeling of hurt and sadness. “ these feelings
I swallow down
like nails” I like this metaphor. Some days it’s exactly like nails that cut. Great piece. H🌷
So relatable. You’ve done a remarkable job in describing the airless feeling of hurt and sadness. “ these feelings
I swallow down
like nails” I like this metaphor. Some days it’s exactly like nails that cut. Great piece. H🌷
10th Oct 2021 5:07am
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10th Oct 2021 12:44pm
10th Oct 2021 7:04pm
No good answers except, stop and breath. When everything is happening at once be still and breath, deep, slow cleansing breathes and focus. Change doesn't happen in stasis but you need to know where YOU are before you can decide how to get where you're going.
10th Oct 2021 7:48pm
A perfect answer. I appreciate your kind and guiding words. I truly appreciate you and your friendship. Such wonderful advice, wonderful.
10th Oct 2021 7:54pm
A last word of advice, if you're going to hang around me make sure you've got money for bail! 😁😂😂😂
10th Oct 2021 7:56pm
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10th Oct 2021 8:10pm
How else are you gonna play monopoly unless you have a get out of jail free card 😁😂😂
10th Oct 2021 8:15pm
Anonymous
11th Oct 2021 3:59pm
Beauty in the broken....poetry at its best.
The most creative writing evolves from our lowest ebb.
And breathe....we collectively relate to this i imagine.
The most creative writing evolves from our lowest ebb.
And breathe....we collectively relate to this i imagine.
11th Oct 2021 4:44pm
Thank you so much for the kind comment. I believe collectively, we sure can relate.
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