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Penumbrae
All of these unwept tears
Await:
Patient -
Perhaps,
for
that
Moment -
where
the
shadow
is
Cast
so
Vast,
over
my
Soul,
cold -
as
the
Light
of
my
Life
is
eclipsed
in
[Shadow
&
Segments
of
self
Become
The
Know.]
Published 3rd Oct 2021
Author's Note
I was thinking of the road to awe.
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The author encourages honest critique.
4th Oct 2021 10:52am
Thank you for your... honest critique.
I disagree.
I like the form.
or... the form is self aware and prefers the freedoms of existence.
Gratitude.
I disagree.
I like the form.
or... the form is self aware and prefers the freedoms of existence.
Gratitude.
3rd Oct 2021 5:19pm
I have to agree with Sw3374ng3r. This would be a really powerful piece if your structure was tighter. It’s difficult to read as it is.
4th Oct 2021 10:54am
Thank you Eerie.
I think that an idea is capable of expansion and compression, which I rather enjoy and appreciate...
an idea is a living-breathing thing...
I listen to the idea...
I appreciate your insight...
You bring about expanding levels of examination...
I see this thing... this thing that lies beyond the senses...
I sense it...
in the place where I seek...
Excuse this aside... twas inspired by your words...
Gratitude...
I think that an idea is capable of expansion and compression, which I rather enjoy and appreciate...
an idea is a living-breathing thing...
I listen to the idea...
I appreciate your insight...
You bring about expanding levels of examination...
I see this thing... this thing that lies beyond the senses...
I sense it...
in the place where I seek...
Excuse this aside... twas inspired by your words...
Gratitude...
3rd Oct 2021 11:56pm
I love the skeletal structure and the depth that you have managed to dig down to. Great ink, Cypher.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
4th Oct 2021 10:55am
