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10th Month
The wind rides low in steady rills,
the air’s aswirl with leaves in flight;
and poplars flame along the hills
to fire October’s golden light.
the air’s aswirl with leaves in flight;
and poplars flame along the hills
to fire October’s golden light.
Published 2nd Oct 2021
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20th Jun 2024 8:20am
I have noticed the consistent rhyme scheme. The poem follows an ABAB rhyme scheme, with "rills" rhyming with "hills" and "flight" rhyming with "light." This consistent pattern provides a pleasing and harmonious structure. The rhymes are perfect, enhancing the musicality of the poem. "Rills" and "hills," as well as "flight" and "light," are strong and natural rhymes that contribute to the poem's lyrical quality.
This consistent beat creates a rhythmic flow that is easy to read and pleasing to the ear.
Example: "The wind / rides low / in stea / dy rills," (da-DUM / da-DUM / da-DUM / da-DUM)
The meter and the natural flow of the language combine to create a smooth and steady rhythm, mimicking the gentle movement of the wind and the leaves described in the poem.
The wind is personified as riding "low in steady rills," giving it a gentle and purposeful movement. The poplars are described as flaming, which metaphorically suggests their bright, fiery colors in autumn. These poetic devices enhance the expressive quality of the poem.
This consistent beat creates a rhythmic flow that is easy to read and pleasing to the ear.
Example: "The wind / rides low / in stea / dy rills," (da-DUM / da-DUM / da-DUM / da-DUM)
The meter and the natural flow of the language combine to create a smooth and steady rhythm, mimicking the gentle movement of the wind and the leaves described in the poem.
The wind is personified as riding "low in steady rills," giving it a gentle and purposeful movement. The poplars are described as flaming, which metaphorically suggests their bright, fiery colors in autumn. These poetic devices enhance the expressive quality of the poem.
