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Prisms
Haloes beneath street lights
Shadows stir beneath nights
Scurrying legs in the dregs
All things become:
Remnants
of
some
Hypnotic gaze -
of
the
sun,
Portraying clouds that run
Away from oblivion -
In
Sums
In
Unison
As
Shadows shape - thought shaped
contemplations
And turn
them
to
Prisms.
Published 17th Sep 2021
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17th Sep 2021 12:31pm
Dear CO,
As I read this poem i kept thinking how many times something like this has happened in terms of my mind shifting shapes. Morphing things into different objects depending on whatever I was focusing on at the time.
“ Hypnotic gaze -
of
the
sun,
Portraying clouds that run
Away from oblivion - ” this is such a cool description, to me, of those mini zone outs, where you fixate and stare at something and the mind and body freeze. Yet, you can still see things going on around you but they’re like an impressionists painting. To be sure, I’ve missed your intended meaning of this poem, however, I always like how your writing leads me to think in so many directions.
I keep forgetting to mention this, I also find your formatting very cool. Lends itself to a further ethereal quality. H🌷
As I read this poem i kept thinking how many times something like this has happened in terms of my mind shifting shapes. Morphing things into different objects depending on whatever I was focusing on at the time.
“ Hypnotic gaze -
of
the
sun,
Portraying clouds that run
Away from oblivion - ” this is such a cool description, to me, of those mini zone outs, where you fixate and stare at something and the mind and body freeze. Yet, you can still see things going on around you but they’re like an impressionists painting. To be sure, I’ve missed your intended meaning of this poem, however, I always like how your writing leads me to think in so many directions.
I keep forgetting to mention this, I also find your formatting very cool. Lends itself to a further ethereal quality. H🌷
18th Sep 2021 11:53am
Hi H.
I would like to here place the two hands bowing in deepest reverence and respect, because I have the deepest reverence and respect for you.
Thank you.
I would like to here place the two hands bowing in deepest reverence and respect, because I have the deepest reverence and respect for you.
Thank you.
Anonymous
- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
17th Sep 2021 4:34pm
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