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branding Irons
Published 18th Aug 2021
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“ A poem should have the touch … the way sunlight falls on Braille.” …..silent lotus
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Anonymous
19th Aug 2021 8:15am
I like how it reads like a symbolist poem, the conflating of the entrepot with the psychological river of discontent.
Interesting use of white space & font.
Enjoy the way the speaker's psychological itinerary intersects with the "her's" satoris.
Reminds me a big of some of the poems from Rimbaud's book of prose, Illuminations.
The line "oddly odd to me too" feels like it's trying to hard, and the real significance of the line--not the overt cleverness--that this experience is seeming to someone heretofore unmentioned, gets obscured.
Enjoyed!
Interesting use of white space & font.
Enjoy the way the speaker's psychological itinerary intersects with the "her's" satoris.
Reminds me a big of some of the poems from Rimbaud's book of prose, Illuminations.
The line "oddly odd to me too" feels like it's trying to hard, and the real significance of the line--not the overt cleverness--that this experience is seeming to someone heretofore unmentioned, gets obscured.
Enjoyed!
dear Mark
i am extremely grateful for you kindness of such in depth reply
unfortunately some technical glitch placed the wrong poem here for a while
your comment belongs to this poem instead
Waiting for an espresso at The Entrepot
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/427486-waiting-for-an-espresso-at-the-entrepo-t/
a warm smile
silent lotus
i am extremely grateful for you kindness of such in depth reply
unfortunately some technical glitch placed the wrong poem here for a while
your comment belongs to this poem instead
Waiting for an espresso at The Entrepot
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/427486-waiting-for-an-espresso-at-the-entrepo-t/
a warm smile
silent lotus
