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Only You
It is you I love, it is you I see when I close my eyes, it is your heart I feel beating through my chest, it is your voice that sings to my soul. This love is a promise that If nothing else I can give you this, that at my worst or my best I will love you with all I am. When I am lost I am found for when I look into your eyes, it is your gaze that warms me when I am cold, it is your touch that gives me hope when things seem hopeless, when I start to drift away it is your hand that will bring me back to life. It is always your soul that will shine through to me, you are the better angel of my nature cutting beyond the darkness to light my way, we are one forever. Love is not big enough of a word to describe this truth, there are no words, only you.
Published 10th Aug 2021
| Edited 11th Aug 2021
Author's Note
This poem is one i wrote over 10 years ago when i was married, which i am not any longer, but i believe it is still a decent poem which i would love to get some feedback on!
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11th Aug 2021 12:19pm
I agree, it's an excellent love poem; do hope you find that special person again to share it with. A++ HUgs and peace, O
11th Aug 2021 8:26pm
Thankyou TheOralizer, I'm glad you like it and i very much appreciate your kind words. Hugs and peace to you too my friend.
11th Aug 2021 4:51pm
Dear JC,
I think this piece is wonderfully romantic. You captivate your reader with the blush of new love. This sparks so many personal memories I enjoyed recollecting. I always appreciate a poem where the writer acknowledges their love as the better part of themselves. Lovely piece. H🌷
I think this piece is wonderfully romantic. You captivate your reader with the blush of new love. This sparks so many personal memories I enjoyed recollecting. I always appreciate a poem where the writer acknowledges their love as the better part of themselves. Lovely piece. H🌷
11th Aug 2021 8:43pm
Dear Honoria,
I can't tell you how happy it makes me to read your comment and see that this poem elicits such deep, beautiful and personal memories for you. Also thankyou for your candor and honesty which shows me i am on the correct path, you honor me! J C :)
I can't tell you how happy it makes me to read your comment and see that this poem elicits such deep, beautiful and personal memories for you. Also thankyou for your candor and honesty which shows me i am on the correct path, you honor me! J C :)
14th Aug 2021 1:11pm
an ode to love
dramatic narrative freestyle poetry
deep devotion..
nice ink
keep the pen warm
OG respect
dramatic narrative freestyle poetry
deep devotion..
nice ink
keep the pen warm
OG respect
15th Aug 2021 9:03am
Gratitude OG, i started writing poetry in order to turn them into songs, however found that they were oftentimes better staying as poems.
15th Aug 2021 5:58pm
Freestyle structured poetry is very flexible, lyrics or short stories are a few forms, for some cadence seems to be easier obtain in a natural flow where you’re not really concerned with metering or syllable count,
for some it’s a lot easier to convey their message to a better understanding that way because of its natural flow.
.. notebook always open
.. keep the pen warm
OG Respect
for some it’s a lot easier to convey their message to a better understanding that way because of its natural flow.
.. notebook always open
.. keep the pen warm
OG Respect
Hey OG, I couldn't agree more and it also depends on what music i hear in my minds eye when i write a poem and if i can capture it with my guitar or on the keys. If i can the a small rework of the poem to verse, chorus a bridge and maybe an interlude, then on from there! I have written over 300 songs and 89% of them started out as poems, I will have to try and find the original notebook where I wrote them as poems and post some here. No one has seen the poems unlike the songs they became and perhaps they deserve to see the light of day.
Respect, J C.
Respect, J C.
16th Aug 2021 4:34pm
… absolutely!
looking forward to reading more of your work.
keep the pen warm!
OG Respect
looking forward to reading more of your work.
keep the pen warm!
OG Respect
