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22 Breaths
lying naked in the heat
too hot for blanket or a sheet
no wind outside, no window breeze
mind dissolving as it flees
hands stretched out, palms facing sky
I feel recharged, I don't know why
I don't know how it all takes place
it seems to come from outer space...
breathing in and breathing out
rhythmically within without
one,two,three, each breath is new
until reaching twenty-two...
as the light fades I'm impressed
by this something while undressed
this connection with beyond
it seems a place where I belong...
forces larger than I've known
have penetrated through my home
in a current flowing down
and lifting up as they surround
me lying naked in the heat
too hot for blanket or a sheet
mind dissolving as it flees
in what seems a cosmic breeze
too hot for blanket or a sheet
no wind outside, no window breeze
mind dissolving as it flees
hands stretched out, palms facing sky
I feel recharged, I don't know why
I don't know how it all takes place
it seems to come from outer space...
breathing in and breathing out
rhythmically within without
one,two,three, each breath is new
until reaching twenty-two...
as the light fades I'm impressed
by this something while undressed
this connection with beyond
it seems a place where I belong...
forces larger than I've known
have penetrated through my home
in a current flowing down
and lifting up as they surround
me lying naked in the heat
too hot for blanket or a sheet
mind dissolving as it flees
in what seems a cosmic breeze
Published 30th Jun 2021
Author's Note
Unprecedented heat here in Vancouver...40+ celsius...best listened to with headphones...
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I very much enjoyed this. Your use of rhyme and repetition always have great impact for me. Wow, 40+ degrees is SO hot - we've never quite had that in the UK.
Just a question: what is the significance of 22?
Just a question: what is the significance of 22?
In numerology 22 is the 'perfect' number...twice 11 which signifies a new beginning on a higher level...I'm happy you enjoy my rhyming...I love rhyme and rhythm (after all it's really what most of us remember from 'memory work' at school)...thanks a lot for your comment...btw the 40+ temps set Canadian all time records...it's back to normal now (very English type weather here on the Westcoast)
29th Aug 2021 5:36pm
Aha! I didn't know that about 11 or 22, but thought there was a reason for your choice, rather than just being random!
I'm not a very prolific poet (yet) and have only written a handful of rhyming ones, including some silly limericks. I've got a very few rhyming ones on here... two using my beginner Italian, and a couple of English ones called If and Realisation. They just aren't very good though. I tend to be more free-form.
21 degrees with sunny intervals here today, which is normal for August. We went to the beach, but I wasn't hot enough to get in the sea. I'm getting a bit too old to just do it for the sake of it these days!
I'm not a very prolific poet (yet) and have only written a handful of rhyming ones, including some silly limericks. I've got a very few rhyming ones on here... two using my beginner Italian, and a couple of English ones called If and Realisation. They just aren't very good though. I tend to be more free-form.
21 degrees with sunny intervals here today, which is normal for August. We went to the beach, but I wasn't hot enough to get in the sea. I'm getting a bit too old to just do it for the sake of it these days!
