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unmoved by childhood, untouched in adulthood
sometimes i wonder if i’ll ever be kissed
and then i think that what i really want
is to be pulled close against someone
and feel that i’ve entered their ghost
and made a home there
i’m almost middle-aged and i’ve wasted my youth
not coming-of-age
and now i think the clock’s run out on love
and then i think that what i really want
is to be pulled close against someone
and feel that i’ve entered their ghost
and made a home there
i’m almost middle-aged and i’ve wasted my youth
not coming-of-age
and now i think the clock’s run out on love
Published 23rd May 2021
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23rd May 2021 4:10pm
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23rd May 2021 4:12pm
and then i think that what i really want
is to be pulled close against someone
and feel that i’ve entered their ghost
and made a home there
I feel you have perfectly described exactly how it feels to be in love with someone, Jack; as though you've entered their ghost and made a home there. It takes great courage and trust to open yourself to another human enough to allow them to enter; and it takes great courage and trust to enter into another human being and make a home there.
I don't think I could've ever said that more perfectly than you have here. It's a very raw verse which could use some tightening if critique were applicable here ( which you have requested ); however, I think what makes this so endearing is that raw vulnerability you have put forth.
Leave it as is.
is to be pulled close against someone
and feel that i’ve entered their ghost
and made a home there
I feel you have perfectly described exactly how it feels to be in love with someone, Jack; as though you've entered their ghost and made a home there. It takes great courage and trust to open yourself to another human enough to allow them to enter; and it takes great courage and trust to enter into another human being and make a home there.
I don't think I could've ever said that more perfectly than you have here. It's a very raw verse which could use some tightening if critique were applicable here ( which you have requested ); however, I think what makes this so endearing is that raw vulnerability you have put forth.
Leave it as is.
23rd May 2021 4:28pm
Thank you for your kind reply. I tend to use no grammar or punctuation when I want the verse to feel completely raw and unfiltered, so I’m glad that came across.
24th May 2021 2:30pm
"i’m almost middle-aged and i’ve wasted my youth not coming-of-age" That's great
Entering someone's ghost is dangerous for you and them. So it's very cool of you to be aware of the severity of the situation but it's not to late. Love will come soon enough and you will get all and more than you bargained for.
Entering someone's ghost is dangerous for you and them. So it's very cool of you to be aware of the severity of the situation but it's not to late. Love will come soon enough and you will get all and more than you bargained for.
