Trapped in space

That is what I call beautiful poetry in motion my poet.. it's simply amazing in the brevity, yet the narrative tells a story within itself, and good luck in the competition, you have my vote

Hi SKC, many thanks for your kind reply I'm very pleased by your comments, thank you. R

Much respect given is always much respect due, and you are humbly welcome my poet, have an awesome weekend in the making as well

Thank you RiAN very pleased this one comes across, sometimes I'm not sure what's in my head makes the page or the reader so its good to know its working. Best R

Dear R,

I confess to feeling a bit conflicted. It’s format and cinquain style are wonderful and your reference to astronomy- fantastic. As I read a bit more into the actual words I was taken by sadness. Abuse by father over son? This is an amazing poem. Beautifully structured to say so much in such brevity. I wish you all the best for the comp.   H🌷

Thank you Honoria for raising this point, I too was also conflicted by the choice of format and nearly didn't go with it but then I thought about re-birth and the cycle of immerging as something new after a period of darkness, I know that, that transformation doesn't come across in the poem but it could be symbolized by the format. Hope this makes sense and I really appreciate your comments and encouragement. Best R

This one is deep felt.

Thank you Lj really appreciate your comments, its good to know its working.  Best R

This is great. I like your style.

Thank you for the encouragement and taking the time to read and comment, much appreciated. R

No problem. I'll be reading more.