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Two Blue Pills
I stare at them
two blue pills
mocking me
giiving me chills
Who needs sleep
made in a lab
Just stay awake
Won't be that bad
Hours drag on
Two blue pills still sit on the stand
Swallowing them seems like
Too much of a demand
Sleep is vulnerable
We can't have this
So I dont need the pills
Just give me bliss
two blue pills
mocking me
giiving me chills
Who needs sleep
made in a lab
Just stay awake
Won't be that bad
Hours drag on
Two blue pills still sit on the stand
Swallowing them seems like
Too much of a demand
Sleep is vulnerable
We can't have this
So I dont need the pills
Just give me bliss
Published 10th Feb 2012
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10th Feb 2012 7:16am
silly to point out that "blue pills" could easily be seen as valium -which would obviously contradict the stayin awake sentiment of your poem...anyway that being said, i can only assume that your referring to "ecstasy" and if that is the case i enjoy your quick cadence and pretty basic and easy rhyme scheme.( as i know for me taking those pills has in the past been a very simple and quick decision that flowed towards and answer-usually a "yes"- quite easily....."sleep is vulnerable" is an exquisite notion and wording, would love to see you dig into both the wording and concept of that more...plenty to work with here sorta wish you had gone further
13th Feb 2012 5:26am
The blue pills were sleeping pills that Im supposed to take actually, but thanks though
