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Three reasons to leave
I
I seem to be so alone,
talk brings nothing new,
we're only drifting through
some old emotions, me and you.
II
Listen to the empty house,
melancholy papers over fears ,
folds it deep in wasted years,
apathy that each room hears.
III
To drown, I slump in bars,
no thought or loss,
or blood I've coughed,
this time the head comes off.
I seem to be so alone,
talk brings nothing new,
we're only drifting through
some old emotions, me and you.
II
Listen to the empty house,
melancholy papers over fears ,
folds it deep in wasted years,
apathy that each room hears.
III
To drown, I slump in bars,
no thought or loss,
or blood I've coughed,
this time the head comes off.
Published 24th Jan 2021
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25th Jan 2021 5:37am
Dear R,
You’ve certainly listed some very intense reasons not to stay. When it’s time to go it’s just time to go hard though it may be. While a difficult yet relatable subject to comment on your format is admirable with the list and powerful in its brevity. H🌷
You’ve certainly listed some very intense reasons not to stay. When it’s time to go it’s just time to go hard though it may be. While a difficult yet relatable subject to comment on your format is admirable with the list and powerful in its brevity. H🌷
27th Jan 2021 4:54pm
Really appreciate the feedback H, this one was for the competition but the theme was maybe to close for three pieces. Many Thanks R
25th Jan 2021 6:46am
27th Jan 2021 4:55pm
Oh dear SweetO it must just be me Lol I find it very easy to slump in a bar these days, that is of course when they are open :)
27th Jan 2021 10:16pm
