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three little words
Intense feelings for you,
Life shows us when it feels so true,
Openly shown but hidden in sight,
Very soon you see delight,
Eventually you may find,
You are always on my mind,
Openly showing affection,
Undeniably trying to get your attention.
Life shows us when it feels so true,
Openly shown but hidden in sight,
Very soon you see delight,
Eventually you may find,
You are always on my mind,
Openly showing affection,
Undeniably trying to get your attention.
Published 8th Feb 2012
| Edited 21st Feb 2012
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21st Feb 2012 11:17pm
Good subject, nice descriptions... kept it short to coincide with title n function. like that. flow was every where! also. save the punctuation! a condensed format will dictate stops n pauses. over use take power away from their functions!
23rd Feb 2012 1:30am
I wrote this as part poem, part riddle. The clues embedded in it, also I was seeing if hiding something in plain view was easy to see. Thank you for your honest critique.
