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a dumbing
sky ever expanding
world ever closing in
the meat turns
sirius burns out
not a wick long enough
scales down the house lights
eyes to dim
and the apples to rot
'generation expiration'
no more sunrises
without color
glow
understandings
meat putrifies
if it is all
that it can do
world ever closing in
the meat turns
sirius burns out
not a wick long enough
scales down the house lights
eyes to dim
and the apples to rot
'generation expiration'
no more sunrises
without color
glow
understandings
meat putrifies
if it is all
that it can do
Published 13th Nov 2020
| Edited 28th May 2022
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13th Nov 2020 9:31am
Dear G,
For me, your poem is an incredible spotlight on society as we know it right now. Trying to find a little slice of hope and worth along the way can be a monumental challenge some days. Thoughtful write. H 🌷
For me, your poem is an incredible spotlight on society as we know it right now. Trying to find a little slice of hope and worth along the way can be a monumental challenge some days. Thoughtful write. H 🌷
13th Nov 2020 4:22pm
13th Nov 2020 4:39pm
Glad I randomly clicked on your profile.
This a succinct portrait of the world as we know it. The bit about Sirius burning out and a wick not long enough hits hard for me. Probably because I have this weird fear of all the stars burning out.
Well done!
This a succinct portrait of the world as we know it. The bit about Sirius burning out and a wick not long enough hits hard for me. Probably because I have this weird fear of all the stars burning out.
Well done!
20th Nov 2020 3:16pm
What an unusual fear. Why do you think that is? Would that be called astraphobia?
20th Nov 2020 4:52pm
Not sure, but it is always in the back of my head that the stars will burn out. Not sure why.
13th Nov 2020 11:44pm
