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Unforgiven
Tonight, for life, you have been named unforgiven.
As the dark dims, and good an evil are even,
I scream thy name for the pain you have given.
As I said, you are still, unforgiven.
For the wrongs you have done, and the rights you haven't,
You will serve your time, as I hate you with a passion.
And since you have no alliance, because you fooled them so,
with no lover, or companion, you are forever alone.
As you may wander, what thou has done to deserve this.
I tell you one time with ignorant bliss.
"Since you have been named 'Unforgiven' you shall not speak."
"For the humans you have hurt, and some you've pulled out the weak."
As the dark dims, and good an evil are even,
I scream thy name for the pain you have given.
As I said, you are still, unforgiven.
For the wrongs you have done, and the rights you haven't,
You will serve your time, as I hate you with a passion.
And since you have no alliance, because you fooled them so,
with no lover, or companion, you are forever alone.
As you may wander, what thou has done to deserve this.
I tell you one time with ignorant bliss.
"Since you have been named 'Unforgiven' you shall not speak."
"For the humans you have hurt, and some you've pulled out the weak."
Published 30th Jan 2012
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2nd Feb 2012 1:09am
save the periods and commas for writing books! the breaks in phrase signify stopping points. all else is just redundant... a couple of type-o's. "as the dark dims, 'and' good 'and' evil are even".."and and" not good use of words. how about? as the dark dims, while good and evil are even... i like the repetition at the bottom! it revises the initial idea and reenforces the theme. some good ideas in here!
