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AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
ain't no room
for bluebirds
in this shit box, baby
so
drown it
in a bottle of what's cheap
and
set the alarm
and punch that clock
and fumble through
another day
of sort
and shuffle
and wash it all down
and goddamn how
that skirt rides up
and she knows it
and i know it, too,
and all this heart
and tender soul
is delicate
just under the skin
like a woman
soft as summer's night,
flawed and lovely
under the sheet
but then
there ain't no room
for bluebirds
not in this shit box, baby
for bluebirds
in this shit box, baby
so
drown it
in a bottle of what's cheap
and
set the alarm
and punch that clock
and fumble through
another day
of sort
and shuffle
and wash it all down
and goddamn how
that skirt rides up
and she knows it
and i know it, too,
and all this heart
and tender soul
is delicate
just under the skin
like a woman
soft as summer's night,
flawed and lovely
under the sheet
but then
there ain't no room
for bluebirds
not in this shit box, baby
Written by
javalini
Published 25th Aug 2020
Author's Note
I always loved Bukowski's novels more so than his poetry. When I discovered them I read every one, and have read most at least twice. Factotum and Post Office especially cut right through to the bone. Nobody seemed to know better what it felt like to be somehow stuck at the bottom, and nobody expressed the irony and humor of that situation with more finesse. Bukowski, a true genius, blessed us in a thousand ways.
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Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 3:38pm
And this most certainly does him justice, Javalini. Best of luck in the judging.
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Re: Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 5:10pm
Thanks so much, Ahavati.
I think Bukowski freed the literary spirit in a lot of us.
And turned us into poets.
I think Bukowski freed the literary spirit in a lot of us.
And turned us into poets.
Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 3:42pm
Re: Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 5:12pm
Thank you, L.
The man inspired so many with his amazing truth and wit.
A genuine working class hero.
The man inspired so many with his amazing truth and wit.
A genuine working class hero.
Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
Anonymous
25th Aug 2020 4:36pm
You worked the repetitions in masterfully; it never came close to monotonous. I was transported. You channeled him darn good.
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Re: Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 5:16pm
Thanks, Johnny.
I really liked the first three lines but worried over the rest of it. I finally had to stop tweaking it. I'm glad it came off well.
Thanks again.
I really liked the first three lines but worried over the rest of it. I finally had to stop tweaking it. I'm glad it came off well.
Thanks again.
Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 5:45pm
Re: Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 6:57pm
Thanks, Daniel.
It's the shit box blues.
Thanks so much for reading and commenting.
Always an honor.
J.
It's the shit box blues.
Thanks so much for reading and commenting.
Always an honor.
J.
Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 6:53pm
Re: Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 7:19pm
Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 7:00pm
all hail the Buke!
this is so very well done. i used the same poem as inspiration for the comp.
one little quibble. should the last line be "not in this shit box, baby?" i think you've left out an 'in.'
this is so very well done. i used the same poem as inspiration for the comp.
one little quibble. should the last line be "not in this shit box, baby?" i think you've left out an 'in.'
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Re: Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
25th Aug 2020 7:10pm
Thanks, Daisy, for pointing that out.
And for your kind comments.
You are much appreciated.
J
And for your kind comments.
You are much appreciated.
J
Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
26th Aug 2020 9:08am
Re: Re. AIN'T NO ROOM FOR BLUEBIRDS (For Bukowski)
26th Aug 2020 1:35pm
Thank you, nomoth.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Bukowski means so much (and so many different things) to so many, and the comp is inspirational.
I'll be rereading some Bukowski this week, I think.
Thanks again.
J.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Bukowski means so much (and so many different things) to so many, and the comp is inspirational.
I'll be rereading some Bukowski this week, I think.
Thanks again.
J.